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HOW TO WRITE A WORLD CLASS PAPER
Scientific and Medical Editing and Writing
TIPS, TRAPS AND TRAVESTIES
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The reviewer is clearly ignorant of the work of
Bonifaci et al. (2008) showing that the electric
field strength in the ionization zone of the
burned corona is less than the space charge free
field before the corona onset. Thank you for
your comment. However, we feel that the
assumption in our model is supported by recent
work by Bonifaci et al. (2008), who showed that
the electric field strength in the ionization
zone of the burned corona is less than the space
charge free field before the corona onset
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Department of Biological Sciences, Michigan
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Department of Biological Sciences, Michigan
Technological University
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Attention to details (????) Check and double
check your work (????) Consider the reviews
(????) English must be as good as possible
(??????) Presentation is important (????) Take
your time with revision (??????) Acknowledge
those who have helped you (??????????) New,
original and previously unpublished
(??????????) Critically evaluate your own
manuscript (???????) Ethical rules must be obeyed
(??????????) Nigel John Cook, Editor-in-Chief,
Ore Geology Reviews
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Scientific and Medical Editing and Writing
We edit English scientific manuscripts for
Clarity Correct grammar
Conciseness Native-English style
Accuracy Journal guidelines
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rejection from peer review
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  Association
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• Genomic Sciences Research Complex, Riken
• Shiseido Research Center
• Japanese Foundation for Cancer Research

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