Title: DESCRIPTION
1 2TRAITS
- Key Elements of a Descriptive Essay
- sense details (more than just sight)
- arranged spatially
- to support a Dominant Impression
3ASSIGNMENT
- To describe a familiar object utilizing
- only SENSE DETAILS
- -sight -taste
- -sound -touch
- -smell
- To describe only the physical characteristics
- To appeal to the senses to use concrete details
4TOPICS
- 1) Your dorm room or bedroom (the room in your
home where you spend the most time) - 2) Your automobile
- 3) The master bedroom in Edgar Allan Poes The
Tell-Tale Heart
5PREWRITING
6PREWRITING
- 1) 5 SENSES
- make 5 lists (one for each sense)
- sight, smell, sound, taste, touch
- under each, list as many relevant details
regarding your topic as possible
7PREWRITING
- 2) IMPRESSIONS
- from the previous lists, make connections
between items on the previous lists - group according to likeness
- that is, certain sense details are related by
the impression that they create - eerie
- messy
- feminine
8PREWRITING
- 3) DOMINANT IMPRESSION
- the longest list of impressions from the
previous lists will be your dominant impression, - the most striking impression concerning your
object - to this list add
- adjectives
- adverbs
- similes/metaphors
9PREWRITING
- 4) SYNONYMS
- Make a list of synonyms for your Dominant
Impression - Consult a thesaurus
- Tidy
- neat
- orderly
- organized
- uncluttered
- anal-retentive/obsessive-compulsive
10INTRODUCTION
11INTRODUCTION
- FUNNEL EFFECT
- Generalize 1st
- Introduce your topic
- Most people, Most college students
- Narrow your focus
- Some
- Others
- Focus on you
- Me
- End with Thesis Statement
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13INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECT EXAMPLES
- 1) Owning a car these days is a necessity,
especially for students at a community college.
Looking around the parking lot at Luzerne County
Community College, I usually see three types of
cars the new, high-end graduation-gift cars,
the modified sports cars, and the run-down first
cars. Unfortunately, my car is one of the
latter.... (thesis with clear Dominant
Impression My gray 1986 Oldsmobile Omega is a
Bondo Buggy, especially in terms of its exterior,
interior, and trunk.)
14INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECT EXAMPLES
- 2) Most people have a place to go to feel
refreshed when life gets too tough. (OR) Most
people have a place they visit to get away from
everyday life. It could be a car, a place in
nature, or a room at home. For me it is my
bedroom. (then comes the thesis with clearly
stated Dominant Impression)
15Thesis Statement
16INTRODUCTIONTHESIS STATEMENT
- Comes at the end of the first paragraph (Funnel
Effect)
TOPIC MAIN IDEA SUPPORT
17INTRODUCTIONTHESIS STATEMENT
- Example for Descriptive Essay
- My car is a junker in terms of its.
- Three aspects of my car that make it a junker are
the front seat, the back seat, and the trunk. - Contains the Dominant Impression and the 3
aspects/parts of your object that support it. - TOPIC MY CAR
- D.I. JUNKER
- SUPPORT (1) FRONT SEAT
- (2) BACK SEAT
- (3) TRUNK
18Dominant Impression
19INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION
- CHARACTERISTICS of a Dominant Impression
- ADJECTIVE or NOUN
- Declared in thesis statement
- Unifying or controlling aspect ambiance this
will link all of your sense details. - Without this, your details are like marbles
without a jar. - The first adjective that comes to mind when you
think of your car.
20DOMINANT IMPRESSION
SENSE DETAIL
SENSE DETAIL
SENSE DETAIL
ALL SENSE DETAILS RELATE TO SUPPORT DOMINANT
IMPRESSION
21INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION
- HOW TO CREATE a Dominant Impression
- Write the 5 senses on a blank sheet of paper
with room beneath each to write - Then, list as many details that appeal to a
particular sense under its name - Go from the front of the car to the back from
the outside to the inside - Then, see which details are related to each
other, that paint a similar picture of the
object, and group them together - What these details relate to will be your
Dominant Impression.
22INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION EXAMPLES
- ROOM
- oasis of peace,
- tranquil refuge,
- feminine/masculine,
- reflects personality (you must briefly define
your personality use the appropriate adjective
before the word personality creative
personality, artistic temperament), - reflects my musical tastes,
- disaster area,
- pig sty
23INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION EXAMPLES
- CAR
- total embarrassment, Bondo Buggy,
- off-road monster,
- Junk Mobile,
- typical college students (in terms of mess,
neglect, ...), - typical first car (in terms of price,
efficiency...), - The Black Beauty, The Polar Bear
- giant toy, sporty car, Daddys car,
- accessorized car (Pimp My Ride) (tricked out)
24BODY
25BODY
- 3 Body paragraphs
- (3 paragraphs 3 parts of your object)
- TOPIC SENTENCE
- starts each paragraph
- reiterates your thesis, Dominant Impression
- DESCRIPTION
- sense details, figurative language
- that supports only your Dominant Impression
- CLINCHER SENTENCE
- ends, wraps up the paragraph
- reiterates your Dominant Impression
26BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 1) DESCRIBEDO NOT LIST!!
- Describe items found in your car/room
- Lists do not describe lists are more exemplary
than descriptive - This is a descriptive essay using sense details,
not an illustrative essay using reasons - Show rather than tell
- Make us see, smell, taste, feel, hear it as you
want us toto fit your Dominant Impression
27BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 2) SENSE DETAILS only
- Appeal to the 5 senses, not just sight
- Appeal to as many of the 5 that are relevant
- Consult your prewriting lists
- Relying solely on sight ? leads to LISTS
- Number, size, shape, texture, material,
odor/scent, taste, sound
28BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 3) SIMILES METAPHORS
- use similes metaphors to reinforce your D.I.
- EX The smell is like OR The smell reminds
me of wet, moldy leaves soaking in a crammed rain
gutter for a month. (not a pleasing D.I.) - rust cancer, leprosy, flesh-eating bacteria
- angry red beast headlights giant glaring
eyes, grillhungry chrome jaws, bumperchin with
battle scars (continue the metaphor throughout,
only those details that support beastly) - Warning Similes only support your sense
details they do NOT replace the need for sense
details.
29BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 4) Relate all SENSE DETAILS to your DOMINANT
IMPRESSION - all details should reinforce your D.I.
- if it does not, omit the detail
- all sense details and metaphors should support a
single impression - this is NOT a word picture in which you
describe every aspect of your car - instead, focus your description on your D.I.
30BODYRelate all SENSE DETAILS to your DOMINANT
IMPRESSION
-
- Repeat THESIS
- Another aspect of my room that makes it a pig
sty is. - at the start of each paragraph
- ADJECTIVES and ADVERBS that are synonymous with
your Dominant Impression - ADJ busy hectic, energetic, bustling, crowded,
swarming, packed, jammed, overrun, popular,
populous, active, lively
31BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 5) Use TRANSITIONS
- between sentences (logically or spatially
connect details in each sentence) AND - between paragraphs (repeat thesis)
- 6) Use proper PN REFERENCE
- especially when generalizing in Introduction
- Everyone has a place he/she could call his/her
own. - see how the use of he/she gets old fast
- so go plural Most people have a place they
could call their own. -
32BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 7) DICTIONuse creative, selective, and pointed
details words (employ concrete/specific word
choice) - 8) Include an INTRODUCTION (see above) and a
CONCLUSION (see below or consult the textbook) - 9) Have a CLEAR VISION of the object (best to
visit the place you will describe)
33BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 10) Have a CAREFUL SELECTION of DETAILS
- only those that support your DI
- 11) Maintain a consistent point-of-view (POV)
- no second person POV you
- your room, your car, your impression, your
details ? your POV (speak from the I)
34BODY DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive
Essay
- 12) COHERENCE
- develop a logical flow of ideas/details
- camera angle -- spatial organization
- 13) Paragraph Structure
- 3 Body paragraphs 3 parts of car/room
- do NOT arrange the essay around the senses (each
paragraph is not one of the senses) - 14) REMEMBER
- this is NOT a why or because essay which is
supported with reasons - instead, use aspect, feature, characteristic,
portion
35BODYTAKE THE HINT
- SENSE DETAILS ONLY
- ONLY THOSE SENSE DETAILS THAT SUPPORT YOUR
DOMINANT IMPRESSION - IF ANY DETAIL DOES NOT SUPPORT YOUR DOMINANT
IMPRESSIONNO MATTER HOW COOL OR INTERESTING IT
MAY BEOMIT - IT FROM THIS ESSAY
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37BODY DONTs
- 1) DO NOT LIST items found in your car/room
this does not describe lists are more exemplary
than descriptive (this is a descriptive essay
using sense details, not an illustrative essay
using reasons) (show rather than tell) - 2) Do NOT just throw ideas onto the page make
sure you have a Dominant Impression -- a clear
purpose, a point be a movie director and limit
what you want the audience to see, to see it/them
from your perspective
38BODY DONTs
- 3) Do NOT describe emotions, feelings,
personality (these are not sense details) - 4) Do NOT use pat expressions/clichés (rough
around the edges), contractions (Ive, its),
poor diction (things, a lot), or
abbreviations (especially CDcompact disc) - 5) NUMBERS 3 syllables/numerals 350, 1 or 2
syllables/numerals six, twenty-five - year 1998, 2005)
39CONCLUSION
40CONCLUSIONPURPOSE of CONCLUDING PARAGRAPHS
- To stress the importance/relevance of your
thesis (SO WHAT?!) - To repeat your purpose
- To repeat your thesis (moral, point, lesson,
Dominant Impression) - To repeat your main ideas
- To give the essay a sense of completeness/finalit
y - To leave the reader with a final impression
(this is your last chance to convince/persuade
the reader, so make the most of it!)
41CONCLUSION SUGGESTIONS
- Discuss in full the lesson learned
- Suggest larger implications of your findings
- Suggest future papers or research
- Refer back to your purpose and/or scenario
mentioned in your Introduction - Pose rhetorical questions
- Offer a 3rd side to the issue
- End with a CLINCHER SENTENCE
42CONCLUSIONCLINCHER SENTENCE
- Just as you ended each Body paragraph with a
concluding sentence that wrapped up that
point/paragraph, so too will you end the entire
essay - (Thesis Statement Topic Sentence Clincher
Sentence Paragraph Clincher Sentence) - Avoid the empty cliché
- Wrap it all up
- Relate to your point (for example, if you wrote
a process paper on making a PBJ sandwich, end by
saying that you are now hungry for one)
43VISUAL IMPRESSIONS
44BEDROOM 1
45BEDROOM 2
46BEDROOM 3
47CAR 1
48CAR 2
49CAR 3
50CAR 4
51Descriptive Essay VSExample Essay
52Descriptive Essay VS Example Essay
- SENSE DETAILS
-
- Dominant Impression
-
- BODY STRUCTURE
- 3 Body paragraphs
- 3 parts of the room/car
- Each supported by
- sense details ONLY
- metaphors to support DI
-
- LISTS prohibited
- SHOW
- SPATIAL ORDER
- REASONS
-
- Argument/Claim
-
- BODY STRUCTURE
- 3 Body paragraphs
- 3 reasons
- Each supported by
- examples
- descriptive details
- narratives
- types/roles
- LISTS permissible
- TELL
- EMPHATIC ORDER