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Title: Show, Dont Tell


1
Show, Dont Tell!
  • Or How to write narratives in a more vivid and
    interesting way.

2
The Basics
  • Showing will use sensory information.
  • Showing will use active, specific verbs.
  • Showing will usually incorporate dialogue.
  • Showing will utilize imagery (word pictures).
  • Showing will have a close psychic distance (well
    explain this one later).

3
Using Sensory Information
  • Telling sensory information usually consists of
    simplistic statements, such as it smelled, he
    coughed, or she looked pretty. See what
    happens when we SHOW these things instead
  • My nostrils constricted in an effort to keep the
    noxious vapor from assaulting my lungs.
  • His throat made a sound like a blocked toilet as
    he hacked into his hanky.
  • It was as if all the light in the room centered
    on her, luminous and incandescent the sun of a
    small galaxy.

4
Using Active Verbs
  • Verbs can be incredibly specificso why not pick
    the one that best applies to your situation?
  • Think, for instance, about walking. You could
    stride, meander, ramble, amble, gambol, sashay,
    strut, stumble, skip, misstep, glide, stroll,
    hike, wander, float, or mosey. Most verbs have
    variations in meaning, so spend a little time
    looking for the right one!

5
Using Dialogue
  • You jerk! she screamed. Take all of this
    garbage and leave! I never want to see you again!
    Look out below!
  • But, baby, listen, he pleaded. It was all a
    mistakewait! Wait! Dont throw the stereo!
  • Dont you baby me! she shrieked. So, what
    do you think? Think your Cardinals Commemorative
    Bier stein can bounce? Bonsai!
  • They had an awful fight. She threw all of his
    stuff out the window.

6
  • Dialogue can also be useful in less dramatic
    circumstances.
  • How was school?
  • Fine.
  • And how was practice?
  • Fine.
  • How are your grades?
  • Fine.
  • And that nice girl--?
  • Shes fine.
  • Is that all you have to say about everything
    that happened today?
  • Yeah.
  • Could you please tell me something with a little
    detail?
  • I dunno.
  • For Petes sake! I could have a better
    conversation with the dog!
  • Isnt that much more effective than his vague
    answers irritated her?

7
Using Imagery
  • This is the fancy, poetic wording (hence the
    phrase word picture) that will really help fill
    in the scenery and other sensory information. For
    example
  • Comprehension arrived like the spring. After a
    semester of winter, the formulas suddenly bloomed
    forth in vivid detail. She understood
    trigonometry at last!

8
More imagery
  • The mountains rushed into the sky, sheer and
    immoveable. Her lungs filled with air so
    crystalline it revitalized her weary, aching
    muscles, and she longed to climb higher, to reach
    the peak above the clouds where the world was
    carpeted with ghosts of rain and bathed in
    blazing sunlight.

9
Psychic Distance, or How close the reader is to
whats happening
  • For personal essays, it is important that the
    reader feel connected to the writer. How
    connected do you feel to this?
  • A man stepped out into the storm.
  • Pretty vague, right? The psychic distance is,
    well, distant. Its hard to care about whats
    happening.

10
Lets try this
  • Chris squinted his eyes against the driving rain.
  • Thats much closer, right? We have a name and a
    little sensory detail. What about this?
  • I was soaked within seconds. Splashing across the
    parking lot in my soggy jeans and swamped
    sneakers, eyes squinched against the onslaught of
    needle-like drops, pores contracting lest they,
    too, become waterlogged, I silently cursed myself
    for being too cool to carry an umbrella.

11
Get it?
  • SHOWING lets your reader into your experienceso
    work with the prompts provided and see what you
    can do!
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