Outline, Thesis Statement

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Outline, Thesis Statement Quotation

• Outline and Thesis Statement
• Separate QUOTATION
• Integrated QUOTATION
• Using ellipsis
• 2005/10/25
• Ref. http//www.eng.fju.edu.tw/research/documentat
  ion.html

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Outline

• Outline
• Thesis Statement
• Quotation Purposes
• Separated, but not indented.
• Separated, and indented.
• Integrated.
• Practice1, 2, 3, 4.
• Ellipses
• References

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Text 100 ?????

• The thesis Accomplishment needs cooperation to
  fulfill.?
• Slogan
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Text 100 ????? -Outline

• Ideas of polarization
• Status of characters are designed to be the
  opposite situations?
• Color
• Movement of characters?
• Scene design
• Music?

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Text 100 ????? Outline (2)

• Ideas of cooperation Why here?
• Love needs cooperation from each genders
• Peace needs two sites cooperation
• Award needs ones hard work (?)
• Health needs the unification with the body(?)

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Text 100 ????? Outline (3)

• The suggestive meaning Why here?
• 100 means accomplishment though the original
  condition is not harmonious the ingredient is
  definitely pure.?
• Complement can make the situation different.?
• Cooperative association has the meaning of
  cooperation and also it is a selling place, to
  sell foods, to sell health

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Text 100 ????? Revised Thesis

• To sell the ideas of 100 and cooperation, the CF
  shows the apparently opposing things working well
  together, though neither their opposition is real
  nor the idea of cooperation.

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Text 100 ????? Revised Structure

• Key words 100 and cooperation, false
  opposition.
• Opposition
• false opposition
• diligence and I? 100 diligent?,
• health and I ? 100 healthy bodies?
• Cooperation
• Cooperation, friendship,
• Cooperation ? company, corporation
• ? a happy world of tomato juice?

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Thesis Statement (2)

• Thesis statement to express there are too many
  unnatural things on the world, and people almost
  forget the original and true side of everything,
  including the affections.
• ? The song expresses both through the lyrics and
  the melody that modern people are exhausted by
  all kinds of artificial things they use, put on
  themselves, turn themselves and their love into.

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3. Quotation Purposes

• Purposes avoid plagiarism, increase credibility
  by giving evidence or support, for close
  analysis.
• Kinds paraphrase and direct quote (further
  divided into separated and integrated)
• Things to Consider
• Whether the quotes are supportive or distractive.
  (Dont let the quotes to speak for you.)
• Punctuation format
• Smoothing the syntax with transitions, etc.
• USING ELLIPSES and other alterations of sources.

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3-1. Separated Quotation

• St. Paul declared, "It is better to marry than to
  burn."
• In his first epistle to the Corinthians, St. Paul
  commented on lust "It is better to marry than to
  burn. (a separate unit of the sentence.)

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3-2. Separated and Indented

• As for the novels, Atwood's debut The Edible
  Woman locates her vital position in Canadian
  literature. transition For Atwood, "literature
  is a means to cultural and personal
  self-awareness. In her opinion, Canada's
  central reality is the act of survival Canadian
  life and culture are decisively shaped by the
  demands of a harsh environment. Closely related,
  in Atwood's view, to this defining act of
  survival is the Canadian search for territorial
  identity"(who said it? 21). Thus in Atwood's
  novels, the characters, especially the female
  protagonists, are the representation of seeking
  for survival and quest for self-identity.
• (The quote 1) should be more than four lines and
  thus put in a separate paragraph with
  indentation 2) is too long.)

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3-2. Separated and Indented Correction

• As for the novels, Atwood's debut The Edible
  Woman locates her vital position in Canadian
  literature. transition For Atwood,
• . . . Literature is a means to cultural and
  personal self-awareness. Canada's central
  reality is the act of survival Canadian life and
  culture are decisively shaped by the demands of a
  harsh environment. Closely related, in Atwood's
  view, to this defining act of survival is the
  Canadian search for territorial identity. (who
  said it? 21)
• Thus in Atwood's novels, the characters,
  especially the female protagonists, are the
  representation of seeking for survival and quest
  for self-identity.
• (The quote still is too long, and the paragraph
  not coherent.)

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3-3. Separated -Correction

• (getting a topic sentence reducing irrelevant
  parts)
• In Atwood's novels, the characters, especially
  the female protagonists, seek for survival and
  self-identity. For Atwood, "Canada's central
  reality is the act of survival Canadian life and
  culture are decisively shaped by the demands of a
  harsh environment. Closely related, in Atwood's
  view, to this defining act of survival is the
  Canadian search for territorial identity"(Name
  21). For instance, Atwood's debut, The Edible
  Woman, deal with a womans attempt to survive in
  a city where humans are eating up one another.
  (More on this novel, or the other novels by
  Atwood. )

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3-4. Integrated Quotations

• Separated
• As points out, For Mrs. Warren to be a
  prostitute and want her daughter to be
  respectable would be hypocritical only if her
  original motive for entering the profession had
  been an innate love for it, rather than a
  realization that solid material foundations are
  the precondition for any hope of a better life
  ?74?.
• Integrated (syntax smoothed)
• Mrs. Warren is not hypocritical in wanting her
  daughter to be respectable, since her
  motivation for going into the business of
  prostitution is not, as put it, an innate love
  for it but a realization that solid material
  foundations are the precondition for any hope of
  a better life ?74?.

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3-4. Integrated

• As a professor of history, Tony tells her
  students, history is a construct,any point of
  entry is possible and all the choices are
  arbitrary(4).
• Correction As a professor of history, Tony tells
  her students that history is a construct, . .
  . ,any point of entry is possible and all the
  choices are arbitrary(4).

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3-4. integrated

• it points out in Critical that it was
  inevitable that Humanist interest in the Latin
  and Greek classics should also produce a new kind
  of English tragedy(221).
• Corrections
• Critical Reader points out that it was
  inevitable that Humanist interest in the Latin
  and Greek classics should also produce a new kind
  of English tragedy(221).
• Emphasis placed on a certain idea
• Critical Reader points out that with
  contemporary humanist interest in the Latin and
  Greek classics, producing a new kind of English
  tragedy was inevitable(221).

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3.5 Practice (1)

• c. the broken man who she live with
• A plastic surgery doctor who has suffered burning
  and part of him is polystyrene
• d. the narrator himselfunnecessary
• A man who loves She in the lyrics but confusing
  whether she is real or not.

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3.5 Practice (2)

• c. The young man hysterically asks him, Is it
  because were all going to die? He answers, No,
  you dont know what you ask of me. However,
  finally, he tells them why he is lying down
  there, and, after knowing the answer, all of them
  do so.

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3.5 Practice (3)

• c.Lyrics
• A green plastic watering can For a fake
  chinese rubber plantIn the fake plastic earth
  That she bought from a rubber manIn a town
  full of rubber plansTo get rid of itselfIt
  wears her out, it wears her out

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3.5 Practice (3)

• Quotation
• All the world, the lyrics shows, is filled
  with plastic objects such as, a plastic watering
  can, a rubber plant and the fake plastic earth.
  Even human beings can be made of rubber and a
  town can be full of rubber plans, which the town
  uses to get rid of itself.

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3.5 Practice (4)

• Lyrics Just by Radiohead
• You do it to yourself, you doAnd that's what
  really hurtsIs that you do it to yourselfJust
  you and no one elseYou do it to yourselfYou do
  it to yourself

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3.5 Practice (4)

• Quotation 1
• A man may fall on his slippery liferoad and hope
  to get sympathy. However, he might be intended
  to fall though he already knows there is an
  obstacle ahead as the lyrics of the band
  Radiohead puts it, you just do it to yourself.
  (Sentence Structure)

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3.5 Practice (4)

• Quotation 1 --Correction
• In life a man may fall on a slippery road and
  expect to get sympathy from others. However, he
  may intend to fall, although he already knows
  there is an obstacle ahead. As the lyrics of
  Just (by Radiohead) puts it, you just do it to
  yourself.

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3.5 Practice (4)

• Quotation 2
• In Radioheads lyrics, people misunderstand what
  they are afraid of uncertain things come from
  outside, but instead you do it to yourself, you
  do and thats what really hurts, which indicated
  these uncertain things comes out of ourselves.
  (Run-on S)

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3.5 Practice (4)

• Quotation 2Correction
• In Radioheads lyrics, people thought that what
  they are afraid of came from outside, and it is
  hurting to realize that they do it to
  themselves. (Run-on S)

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3.5 Practice (4) --Good!

• Quotation 3 (The blue parts have been
  corrected.)
• By repeating the words, you do it yourself,
  Radiohead illustrates the idea that we often
  suffer from the consequences that are actually
  caused by ourselves, because it is just you and
  no one else that have brought about such
  consequences.

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3.6 Ellipsis

• Improper Besides, in this is my greatest
  performance and all of the actresses who won my
  parts will say. The life for women is like to
  play a role for performance life is an image for
  others. Even when one of the women disappears,
  there are still many women eager to take her
  role.
• Meaning incomplete (like some email writings. ?)

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Ellipsis -revised

• Another source of constraint in this womans life
  is that of playing roles, of which even her death
  is one. Upon her death, the other actresses
  who will take over her role praise it by saying
  how wonderful to let yourself go that mad, how
  wonderful . . . , as if it were a matter of
  performance on the stage.

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Reference Quotation

• Types of quotation punctuation
  http//www.eng.fju.edu.tw/concom_databank/Marguer
  ite/SSW3.htm
• Verbs to use proper format and varying sentence
  structure. http//www.eng.fju.edu.tw/concom_datab
  ank/Marguerite/SSW2.htm