Title: Plain English business writing
1Plain English business writing
- David Stephensen
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5Business English best practice
- Active voice
- Short sentences
- Bullets and numbers
- Simple words
- Verbs not nouns
6What is the problem?
- It takes time to read. Time is money.
- If your message doesnt arrive, you lose.
- Everybody wants quick access to information
7What is the solution?
- Know your audience.
- Use plain English.
- Structure your information for easy reading.
8Knowing your audience (overview)
- Understand their
- Context
- Viewpoints
- Skills
- Use tools
- Personas
- Scenarios
9Plain English (overview)
- Everyday words
- Short sentences
- Active voice and writing personally
- Same words each time
- No synonyms
- Same word pattern
- Clear meaning
10Structure (overview)
- Chunkingthe 72 rule
- People only cope with about 7 things at a time.
- People learn by grouping things into chunks.
- Tables
- Headings
- Bullets and numbers
11Knowing your audience
12Knowing your audiencecontext
- In what context will they read the information?
- Motivation?
- Pressure or distractions?
- Other information available?
- Access to experts for help?
13Knowing your audienceviewpoints
- What is the viewpoint of your audience?
- Confident?
- Caring about detail
- Willing to use initiative?
- Potentially hostile?
14Knowing your audienceskills
- What do they know already?
- What detail do you need?
- Is it OK to use jargon?
- What is their reading age?
- Do you have to use REALLY simple language?
15Knowing your audiencetools
- Personas
- Create imaginary people who are your typical
audience members. - Make them real create a past, present and
future for them. - Scenarios
- Create imaginary situations for your personas and
make them real.
16Knowing the audienceexamples
- Directions around your suburb
- With residents you can say Go to the hospital.
- Industry jargonuse it when needed.
- neoplasm (to doctors)
- tumour (to other people)
17Knowing the audienceexamples
- Absolute location
- Melways Map 30, A7
- Third shop along Mitchell St from the High St
corner (partly relative) - Relative location
- Take the third turn left and then the second turn
right.
18Plain English language
19Same words each time
- Always use the same word for somethingDont
change names for variety. - Use the same word patternDont change for the
sake of it. - Dont worry about being boring.
- Transfer information, dont entertain.
- Use pictures and colour to reduce boredom.
20Everyday words
21More verbs, fewer nouns
- Avoid making verbs into nouns.
- Dont say Make application.
- Say Apply.
- Watch out for noun strings.
- tank restraint safety lock emergency release
lever Being brief is good, but you can go too
far!
22Foreign words
Quiz Point What do these mean?
- i.e., e.g., etc., vs, et al, viz, via
- ergo, ad hoc, per annum, carte blanche, panache,
raison detre, zeitgeist, chutzpeh - Some people dont know foreign words.Use
English! - Do keep enjoying them outside your business
writing!
23Old fashioned words
- These (and many others) have no place in business
English! - hereto hereinafter hereby aforesaid
bequeath asunder
24Short sentences
- Break sentences up.
- Aim for 12 clauses per sentence.
This uses simple language, but it is too long! An
orange is a round reddish-yellow fruit, which
comes from a medium-sized tree harvested in the
winter, and contains Vitamin C, essential for the
vitality of human blood.
25Short sentences
- Break sentences up.
- Aim for 12 clauses per sentence.
This is better! An orange is a round
reddish-yellow fruit. It comes from a
medium-sized tree harvested in the winter.
Oranges contain Vitamin C, essential for the
vitality of human blood.
26Short paragraphs
- Have one idea per paragraph.
27Write personallywe and you
- Address the reader directly.
- Use we and you.
- This helps you to be clear about who does what.
28Write personallywe and you
Impersonal Refunds may be given to customers
who consider that they have not received
satisfactory service.
Personal If you are not satisfied with our
service, we may refund your money.
29Write personallyuse commands
- When writing instructions, use commands
(imperative).
Statement (not imperative) Passengers are not
permitted to open the doors. Doors may only be
opened by crew members.
Command Do not open the doors. Ask a crew
member to open them for you.
30Use active voice
- Quiz Point
- Translate into active voice
- The engine is started by the driver.
31Use active voice
- Quiz Point Answer
- This is in active voice
- The driver starts the engine.
32Use active voice
- Who is the agent?
- The person doing the action.
- We usually want to know who the agent is.
33Use active voice
- Passive voice
- Object goes first.
- Subject (agent) last or missing.
- Reader has to mentally turn it around.
- Sometimes not clear who does what.
- The form must be signed.The notice was
posted by the manager
34Use active voice
- Active voice
- Subject (agent) firstnever missing
- Object last
- Quicker to read
- Clear who does whatApplicants must sign the
form.The manager posted the notice.
35Reifyingwhen you reify, you
- Say that something inanimate is an agent.The
report forces us to consider three
optionsChecking helps you avoid mistakesThe
picture shows how to wrap the parcel - Do not correctly identify the agent. (Agent is
not real!) - Do not communicate the sequence ltAgentgt ltActiongt
ltObjectgt.
36Reifyingpossible cures
- Refer to the author of the document. The
authors of the report force us to consider three
options. - Describe action and consequence. If you check,
you may make fewer mistakes. - Describe action to get information. See the
picture to find out how to wrap the parcel. - Use an appropriate verb for the agent, such as
is or contains.
37Reifying is an advanced topic
- Do not worry too much about reification.
- Even this presentation has it.
- If you worry too much you may
- Waste time and effort
- End up with more verbose results
- Just watch out for missing agents. People need
to know who is responsible.
38Is your meaning clear?
- Simple language can be ambiguous
- Check your work.
- Get someone else to read it.
Hotel Signs Norway Ladies are requested not to
have children in the bar. Budapest Please do not
feed the animals. If you have any suitable food,
give it to the guard on duty.
39When to use plain English
- When you want to give
- Information
- Instructions
- Warnings
- Business communication
40When to use creative English
- Creative writing
- Poetry
- Fiction
- Personal letters
- Essays
- Journalism
41Structure for easy reading
42Chunking and 72
- Only have 7 items at a time.
- If you have more than 7, create groups.
- Give groups names (subheadings).
- If you have more than 7 groups, group the groups
and give them names. - This is the natural way that everyone learns.
43Chunking and 72 example
- Party pies
- Pizza
- Potato chips
- Cup cakes
- Lamingtons
- Birthday cake
- Sauce
- Ice
- Cordial
- Drink jugs
- Cups
- Serviettes
- Plates
- Candles
- Sparklers
- Matches
- Balloons
- Streamers
- Game prizes
- Tablecloths
- Twister game
- Donkey poster
- Blu-tack
- Donkey tails
- Treasure hunt prizes
- Send invitations
- Warm pies
- Mix cordial
- Set out food
- Set up donkey game
- Set up treasure hunt
44Chunking and 72 example
- Food
- Party pies
- Pizza
- Potato chips
- Cup cakes
- Lamingtons
- Birthday cake
- Sauce
- Ice
- Cordial
- Equipment (food)
- Drink jugs
- Cups
- Serviettes
- Plates
- Candles
- Sparklers
- Matches
- Equipment (other)
- Balloons
- Streamers
- Game prizes
- Tablecloths
- Games
- Twister game
- Donkey poster
- Blu-tack
- Donkey tails
- Treasure hunt prizes
- Tasks
- Send invitations
- Warm pies
- Mix cordial
- Set out food
- Set up donkey game
- Set up treasure hunt
45Chunking and 72
- In what way is information the opposite of food?
46Chunking and 72
- In what way is information the opposite of food?
To digest food, we break it down into
components. To digest information, we build it up
into chunks.
47Tables
- If you have more than two pairs of items, use a
table. - The Blue team has 5 members, the Red team has 7
members and the Green team has 4 members.
48Tables
- If you have more than two pairs of items, use a
table. - The Blue team has 5 members, the Red team has 7
members and the Green team has 4 members.
49Headings
- Put headings and subheadings in your text
- Readers can quickly see what it is about.
- Readers may only need to read some parts.
- The headings chunk the information for easy
digestion.
50Headings
- Make a hierarchy
- Normally uses level 1, 2 and 3.
- Shows the structure of your document.
- Makes it easy to generate a table of contents.
51Lists
- If you list 3 or more items, show them on
separate lines. - If there are 9 or more items, split the list into
two levels (chunking). - Know when to use bullets and numbers.
52Bullets and numbers
- Numbers
- Use when there is order or rank
- Steps
- Ranking
- Bullets
- Use for other lists.
- Neither
- OK for single line lists.
53Bullets and numbersexample
- 1 Heat the pan.
- 2 Fry onions.
- 3 Brown the meat.
- 4 Add the curry paste.
- 5 Fry for two minutes.
- 6 Add stock or water.
- 7 Simmer for 20 minutes.
54Bullets and numbersexample
- 1 Heat the pan.
- 2 Fry onions.
- 3 Brown the meat.
- 4 Add the curry paste.
- 5 Fry for two minutes.
- 6 Add stock or water.
- 7 Simmer for 20 minutes.
55Bullets and numbersexample
- Favourite pastimes
- Going to the movies, but only to see shows that
cheer people up - Watching football on TV
- Walking in the bush
- Having coffee with friends
56Bullets and numbersexample
- Favourite pastimes
- Going to the movies, but only to see shows that
cheer people up - Watching football on TV
- Walking in the bush
- Having coffee with friends
57Bullets and numbersexample
- Shopping list
- bread
- lettuce
- pasta
- milk
- bananas
58Parallel form in lists
- Have the same word patterns for all list
itemsdont mix - Words
- Phrases
- Questions
- Commands
59Parallel form in lists
Dont do it this way!
- Favourite pastimes
- Going to the movies, but only shows that cheer
people up - Do you like watching football as much as I do?
- I go walking in the bush every week.
- Coffee with friends
60Parallel form in lists
- Favourite pastimes
- Going to the movies, but only to see shows that
cheer people up - Watching football on TV
- Walking in the bush
- Having coffee with friends
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61Punctuation and grammar revision
! . , ? Misplaced! Dangling! Squinting!
Agreement!
62Commas 1
- Use when the phrase is not essential
- Tim, who smokes, may get cancer.
- Not when the phrase is essential for the
sentence - People who smoke may get cancer.
63Commas
- Separating items in a list, but
- Not separating subject and verb
- The large, grey object fell from the ceiling.
64Which and that
- Which clauses add information and have a comma.
- Go to the main menu, which shows all options.
- That clauses help to identify or distinguish.
- List all orders that have status Approved.
65Misuse of modifiers gt ambiguity
- Changes we are considering will affect all new
members. (misplaced) - People who jog often have knee injuries.
(squinting) - Walking around the town, the prosperity was easy
to see. (dangling)
66Subject and verb agreement
- One of the boys has arrived.
- Several have gone home.
67Subject and verb agreement
- Any, none, some, most depend on the context
- Most of the money is in the bank.
- Most of the crew are aboard.
- Collective nouns depend on the context
- The team has arrived. (as one)
- The team are getting changed. (as individuals)
68Pronoun-antecedent agreement
- The leader and the sponsor have played their
parts. - My friend and brother, Ian, lent me his car for
the occasion. - Everyone has his own path in life.
69Tense
- Present tense
- He eats the cake.
- Past tense
- He ate the cake.
- Future tense
- He will eat the cake.
70Person
- First person (I, we)
- I eat the cake.
- Second person (you)
- You eat the cake.
- Eat the cake!
- Third person (he, she, they, it)
- She eats the cake.
71Verb form
- Indicative (narrative)The Line Manager
authorises the Application for Leave. - Imperative (command)Authorise the Application
for Leave. - Progressive (in the act of -ing)Authorising
the Application for Leave
72The greengrocers apostrophe
- Apostrophes have two correct uses
- PossessiveJohns book, the dogs collars.
- Shortening wordsI wasnt hungry.
- Never use apostrophes just for plurals. These
are correct - Three cappuccinos, please.
- The bank has two new ATMs.
73The greengrocers apostrophe
- Bob the Angry Flowers Quick Guide to the
Apostrophehttp//angryflower.com/aposter.html
74Writing instructionsGeneral best practice
- Tips for better instructions For use anywhere!
75Tense
- Present tense
- Use most of the time.
- Past tense
- Only use to show something in the past.
- Future tense
- Only use to emphasise a time delay. Otherwise
use present tense.
76Shall, Will
- Shall
- Do not use. It sounds pompous and legalistic.
Just say Do it. - Will (future tense)
- Only use to emphasise a time delay. Otherwise
use present tense.
77Must, Please
- Must
- Use sparingly for very important things or people
will ignore it. - If you put it in for something that is optional,
you could fail an audit. - Please
- It is nice to be nice, but please creates word
clutter.
78AND, OR in bulleted lists
- Put AND or OR at the end of each item if it is
not clear whether - All items apply OR
- At least one item applies
79Common terms
- Use consistent naming for everything.
- Build a list of terms
- Let everyone contribute.
- Store in common area.
- Categorise the terms (72!).
- Later on, add definitions to make a useful
glossary.
80Slash /, (s)
- Do not use slash / It creates ambiguity and
confusion. Does it mean or or and? - --- or --- or both is better than and/or
- Do not use (s) or /s to allow for a possible
plural. Just make it plural anyway.
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