Unit Eight : Combine Conciseness and Clarity

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Unit Eight Combine Conciseness and Clarity
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• Accurate prediction of the boundary parameters by
  mathematicians is of heavy emphasis.
• Revised Mathematicians heavily emphasize
  accurately predicting the boundary parameters.

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• An outline of how to install the software program
  is made in the following section.
• Revised The following section outlines how to
  install the software program.

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• A thorough description of the environmental
  impact on the ozone layer was made by Smith
  (1985).
• Revised Smith (1985) thoroughly described the
  environmental impact on the ozone layer.

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• Contributing factors to rainforest depletion
  include overpopulation.
• Revised Overpopulation contributes to
  rainforest depletion.

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• No significant variation between the two
  temperatures occurred.
• Revised The two temperatures did not
  significantly vary.

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• It is impossible to forecast all potential
  workplace hazards.
• Revised All potential workplace hazards can
  not be forecasted.

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• Adjustment of the parameters is unnecessary by
  the control engineer.
• Revised The control engineer does not need to
  adjust the parameters.

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• A significant decline in the investment return
  occurred.
• Revised The investment return significantly
  declined.

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• The investigator made the suggestion that there
  is a close relation between the two conditions.
• Revised The investigator suggested that the
  two conditions are closely related.

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• There is a necessity for a compromise on the
  proposal by both parties.
• Revised Both parties must compromise on the
  proposal.