Dont do these things, but do these other things

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Dont do these things, but do these other things

• Sudha, CMF

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Agree, agree, agree
  Incorrect  Recent discoveries about the
weather reveals that several cycles are
involved. Revised  Recent discoveries about the
weather reveal that several cycles are involved.
  Incorrect A writer is free to express their
opinion. Revised  A writer is free to express
his or her opinion. Revised  Writers are free
to express their opinions.
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Apostrophes

• Its always means It is.  Its always
  signals the possessive.  For example
• We need a sector that knows its moral as well as
  its intellectual limitations.
• We need a sector that knows its moral as well
  as intellectual.
•  
• Whos is always a contraction for who is. 
  The possessive whose requires no apostrophe.
•  
• Incorrect  In the current conflict its uncertain
  whos borders their contesting.
• Revised In the current conflict, its uncertain
  whose borders theyre contesting.

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Fragments are bad

• Incorrect  All of these rules and regulations
  should be made aware of.
• Revised  Athletes should be made aware of all
  these rules and regulations.
• Revised  The management should make the athletes
  aware of all these rules and regulations.

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Modify properly

• Incorrect  When not at work, my hobbies range
  from pani puris to shopping for shoes.
• Revised  When I am not in the office, my hobbies
  range from pani puris to shopping for shoes.
• Revised  When I am not at the office, I devote
  my time to my hobbies, which include everything
  from pani puris to shopping for shoes.

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Match the point

• Incorrect  The candidates goals include winning
  the election, a national health program, and the
  educational system.
• Revised  The candidates goals include winning
  the election, enacting a national health program,
  and improving the educational system. 

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Pronouns rule

• Incorrect  Einstein was a brilliant
  mathematician.  This is how he was able to
  explain the universe.
• Revised  Einstein, who was a brilliant
  mathematician, used his ability with numbers to
  explain the universe.
• Incorrect  In the report, it suggests that
  moderate exercise is better than no exercise at
  all.
• Revised  The report suggests that moderate
  exercise is better than no exercise at all.

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Dont be ridiculous

• Women have come a long way over the course of
  time. In the twenty-first century, women are
  viewed as equal to men on most levels. They can
  work outside the home, they can appear in public,
  and they can do anything that they can imagine.
• Whats the point of this statement?

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Webster is your friend!

• Incorrect  Explaining the rationale for
  treatment can help distil patients fears.
• Revised  Explaining the rationale for treatment
  can help dispel patients fears.

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When in doubt

• REVISE,
• REVISE,
• REVISE!