Pupil examples of varied sentences

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Pupil examples of varied sentences
Semi colon shows clear use of mature punctuation
Sentence begins with adjectives
9L1

• Young and intelligent students of this school a
  school that is recognised for its science
  college and Beacon status, also have access to
  the art facultys wide range of materials,
  which

Embedded phrase to add detail
Key words such as also and which indicate the
use of complex sentences
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More examples
Adverb to add more detail
Detail given about the people
9L1

• Highly trained staff work tirelessly to improve
  exam and coursework grades, therefore resulting
  in not only a fun environment, but also a relaxed
  working atmosphere.

Varied sentence structures and connectives
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And finally
Detail make sentences powerful
Interesting verb

• Blinded by jealousy and rage against her
  emotionally punishing step-family, Cinderella
  indulges in her wildest dreams.
• Beaten. Scared. Solitary. Who will help her? Can
  she succeed against all odds?
• In this heart-wrenching novel, touching on raw
  emotions and drowning sorrow, you learn about
  Cinderella and her tragic story.
• Passion, determination, courage. Will it all end
  in tears?

Questions to engage readers
Short, impact sentences
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What can I do to improve my writing?

• Vary sentence length both short, impact
  sentences and longer complex ones use embedded
  phrases to add detail
• Vary sentence openings use verbs, adverbs,
  adjectives, connectives
• Use a range of punctuation, including colons and
  semi-colons
• Use powerful vocabulary especially verbs