WELCOME to Creative Writing Wheel

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WELCOMEto Creative Writing Wheel

• FIND a seat only 4 to a table
• Room 31
• Mrs. Mittica (formerly Miss Klapatch)
• Trimester 12 weeks
• Mar 4 June 2

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Weds 3/4

• Welcome
• Share names
• Go over course outline
• Letters from past class

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Prepare to Share

• I want to get to know each of you this week so I
  can remember your names as quickly as possible.
• Please share your name/nickname and something you
  hope to write about in this course

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Lets make it a great class

• This week we will discuss our expectations of
  each other and how to best run our class.
• I want this to be one of the most fun classes you
  have while still learning
• My one rule that comes before all others is
  Please be kind to each other. You dont have to
  be best friends with everyone but lets leave the
  teasing at the door and really model how
  respectful teens can be!

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Course OutlineHi-Light Important Things

• Materials
• Website
• Oops Pass/Hall Passes all 7th Grade
• Late work policy
• Cheating
• Grades

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Agenda

• Get Course Outline Signed by parent 5 pts due
  Fri
• Materials for class are due on Fri (notebook,
  folder w/ prongs, index cards)
• FRI finish Wanted Poster

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Letters from Last Semester

• The students from last semester have gone to Art
  but they left notes to give you advice on how to
  do well in this class.
• Read them and share them.
• Many are meant only to funny or scare you, so
  dont take them too seriously ?

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Extension

• Writing Sample (4 sentences)
• Your opinion of yourself as a writer (do you like
  writing, why, why not?)
• Favorite books, do you like reading? Why? Why
  not?
• Best/most challenging subjects in school
• Anything else I should know about you.

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DEAR READING 10 mins

• New Seats
• Read a DEAR book quietly
• Each day when you arrive there will be directions
  on the board for you to start right away
• You should be doing your task when the bell rings

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Agenda

• Get Course Outline Signed by parent 5 pts due
  Fri
• Materials for class are due on Fri
• Get Class procedures signed

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Thurs 3/5

• Class Procedures
• Class Agreement
• AA regal to auditorium

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Table Rep

• Gets 5 Extra Credit
• Must check Agendas for whole table on Mondays
• Must collect papers to hand in for table and
  check that they all have names
• Lots of responsibility, lots of reward

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Class Procedures

• Please follow along and hi-light the most
  important things that I point out to you.
• This paper must stay in your three prong folder
  at all times. You will refer to it when you have
  any questions.

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Website Orientation

• You will have a website scavenger hunt in the
  near future

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Website Orientation

• http//www.southside-ms.pinellas.k12.fl.us/
• You can always search for Southside and you will
  be able to find my website under 7th Grade
  Teachers
• http//www.schoolrack.com/SouthsideFMS/
• This will be the location for files and homework
  and upcoming assignments
• We will be using Moodle once everyone has signed
  up
• www.Goodsearch.com for outhside

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Class Expectations

• Respect do not insult others (not even joking),
  help your group, listen when ANYONE is talking,
  dont use offensive/prejudice words (they make
  you sound uneducated)
• Responsibility do your work, bring your
  materials, never blame anyone else, just fix the
  problem
• Safety keep your hands to yourself, use
  materials the correct way, keep all chair legs on
  the ground, sit correctly in chairs not on tables

Gay Retarded Racist
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What our room will look like

• Respect
• Responsibility
• Safety

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What our room will look like

• Respect
• Responsibility
• Safety

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Wanted Poster
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Wanted Ad Assignment

• Think about all of the qualities you would want
  to have in a teacher.
• THIS SHEET WILL BE HANDED IN so remove it from
  binder
• Brainstorm a list of at least 10 qualities (you
  will submit this list for a 5 point class work
  grade).

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1. Comes to class prepared with all materials
2. Participates in discussion
3. Respects the opinions of others
4. Listens while others are talking
5. Shares ideas even if they seem silly or crazy
6. Is not afraid to take a risk in writing
7. Follows the suggestions and 6 Traits for becoming
   a great writer
8. Uses the writing process
9. Makes jokes at the appropriate time
10. Takes the class seriously
11. Reads and shares great books
12. Makes observations about the world
13. Helps others in need
14. Thinks about safety when acting

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Sample Wanted Posters
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WantedIdeal Student

• Comes to class prepared with all materials --
  Participates in discussion -- Respects the
  opinions of others -- Listens while others are
  talking -- Shares ideas even if they seem silly
  or crazy -- Is not afraid to take a risk in
  writing -- Follows the suggestions and 6 Traits
  for becoming a great writer -- Uses the writing
  process -- Makes jokes at the appropriate time --
  Takes the class seriously -- Reads and shares
  great books -- Makes observations about the world
  -- Helps others in need -- Thinks about safety
  when acting

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Your Assignment

• Create a Wanted Ad that details these qualities
  in a positive way.
• Decorate your ad and make it look like a real
  Wanted poster (see examples).
• You may use any artistic materials that are
  available in the room.

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Good MorningFri

• Take out your materials
• Spiral notebook on desk
• Folder open with course outline signed in the 3
  prongs
• Then
• Finish your 10 Ideal teacher traits

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Agenda

• Finish Wanted Poster due Mon make it look
  nice
• Notes online for next week

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Sample Wanted Posters
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WantedIdeal Student

• Comes to class prepared with all materials --
  Participates in discussion -- Respects the
  opinions of others -- Listens while others are
  talking -- Shares ideas even if they seem silly
  or crazy -- Is not afraid to take a risk in
  writing -- Follows the suggestions and 6 Traits
  for becoming a great writer -- Uses the writing
  process -- Makes jokes at the appropriate time --
  Takes the class seriously -- Reads and shares
  great books -- Makes observations about the world
  -- Helps others in need -- Thinks about safety
  when acting

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Your Assignment

• Create a Wanted Ad that details these qualities
  in a positive way.
• Decorate your ad and make it look like a real
  Wanted poster (see examples).
• You may draw or use the computer

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Class Expectations

• Respect do not insult others (not even joking),
  help your group, listen when ANYONE is talking,
  dont use offensive/prejudice words (they make
  you sound uneducated)
• Responsibility do your work, bring your
  materials, never blame anyone else, just fix the
  problem
• Safety keep your hands to yourself, use
  materials the correct way, keep all chair legs on
  the ground, sit correctly in chairs not on tables

Gay Retarded Racist
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Create a personal page

• Create your own personal page in your notebook to
  show these 3 rules
• Decorate it and make sure you refer to it often

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What do you know?

• Why do we write? What is the point?
• How do we start writing?
• Why do we need rules and steps and process?
• Does anyone use the writing process outside of
  school?

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The Writing Process

• Pre-Writing
• Rough Draft
• Revise
• Edit
• Publish

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Grocery List

• Think about the foods youd like to eat this week
• Make a list of everything to replace like milk,
  eggs, and butter then add the fun stuff like
  snacks
• Check the fridge before you go and realize you
  just ran out of OJ. Add that to the list
• Check the laundry detergent to spell the brand
  right so you dont get a kind that makes your
  clothes smell bad
• Go to the store and use your list to shop

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The Writing Process

• http//www.geocities.com/fifth_grade_tpes/writing_
  process.html

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Pre-Writing

• Definition creating and arranging ideas before
  writing

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• SOURCES OF INSPIRATION - How do I get ideas in
  the first place?
• Look at pictures
• Listen to music
• Observe others
• Remember a dream
• Recall a true story/memory
• magazines/newspapers
• conduct an interview
• radio, tv, internet, movies
• experiences
• role playing
• research
• imagination

• TIPS - What ways can I prewrite?
• free writing
• journaling
• lists
• brainstorming -
• graphic organizers

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Tool Card 1

• Prewriting Def. (use notes we
  just took)
• I can.(use
  notes) watch a movie, make a list.

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SOCIAL

• You may talk at your seats
• Start your homework I have computer paper you
  can use as well as markers

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Monday 3/9

• Open Spiral Notebook
• Divide clean
• page of your notebook
• like this

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Bell Work Intro

• Divide paper into 4 boxes write dates for Mon
  Thurs
• Keep in your notebook to use every day
• If you are absent you must write ABSENT to get
  full credit
• I will randomly collect them for 8 points dont
  skip any

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Mon 3/9 DEAR 10 mins What is the title of your book? Who is the author?

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Agenda
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Monday

• BW
• Agenda
• Writing Process

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Tool Card 1

• Prewriting Def.
• I can.

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Pre-Writing 5 mins

• Brainstorm everything that you know about the
  ocean

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Rough Draft

• Definition any writing at any stage of the
  process that is not yet published may have many
  drafts
• How can I create a Rough Draft?
• Start at the beginning of your story
• Describe an event/topic/character
• Start at the end and work backwards
• Use paragraphs, poetry, dialogue, etc.

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• Be selective in the ideas that you include.
   You don't have to include everything that was in
  your prewriting!  Pick your best ideas.  Make
  sure they relate to each other and your topic.
• WRITE!  WRITE!  WRITE! Don't stop once you start
  writing.  Revising and editing come later.  Just
  let the ideas flow.  
• Don't count words, dont ask how long it should
  be or when it is done.  When YOU feel that you
  have completed your ideas, you are then ready to
  go to the next stage.

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Tool Card 2

• Drafting Def.
• I can.

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Drafting 15 mins

• Start writingchoose a format
• Story
• Letter
• Song
• Play
• News article
• Journal
• Essay
• Other

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Mon 3/9 DEAR 10 mins What is the title of your book? Who is the author? Tues 3/10 Per 2 only Write I rocked FCAT Reading

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Tues Per 2 only

• FCAT reading
• FUN ACTIVITY

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Writing in Rotation

• Rules
• No names of people in this class/school
• No offensive language
• No violence
• Be intelligent try to make sense
• Do not touch the writing of the person ahead of
  you
• Report anything inappropriate
• You must write your NAME each time you add

TOPIC Your NAME (first writer) Start your story
(topic from box) NAME continue story NAME
continue story NAME continue story
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topics

• Nature
• Mountain
• Cats
• Dogs
• Pizza
• Ice cream
• Cars
• Ocean
• family
• Airplanes
• Video games
• Apples
• Swimming pool
• Alligators
• Music
• Sports
• Dreams
• Fashion
• High school

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Mon 3/9 DEAR 10 mins What is the title of your book? Who is the author? Tues 3/10 I rocked FCAT reading
Weds 3/11 FCAT NO CLASS Math FCAT
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Mon 3/9 DEAR 10 mins What is the title of your book? Who is the author? Tues 3/10 FCAT Reading
Weds 3/11 FCAT Math Thurs 3/12 3 2 1 3 Things you can do to pre-write 2 things you can do to draft 1 topic you might write about
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Revising

• Definition making decisions about how you
  want to improve your writing
• How can I revise
• Remember A.R.R.R.Adding-What else does the
  reader need to know?
• Rearranging-Is the information in the most
  logical and most effective order?
• Removing-What extra details or unnecessary bits
  of information are in this pieceof writing?
• Replacing-What words or details could be replaced
  by clearer or stronger expressions?

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• REVISING TIPS - Ask yourself these questions . .
  .
• Can you read it out loud without stumbling?
• Does every word and action count?  
• Is the series of events logical?  Do they relate?
  
• Is it clear what your goal or your main
  character's goal is throughout the piece of
  writing?
• Are vivid/descriptive words used to describe
  characters and/or events?

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• Are you using the same words and phrases over
  and over again?
• Is there a catchy introduction?  Does the
  conclusion leave the reader thinking?
• Do supporting details support only the topic
  sentence of that paragraph?
• Are transitional devices used throughout?
• Are all sentences complete or are there sentence
  fragments?
• Is a vivid mental picture created in the reader's
  mind?

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Revise use a colored PEN10 Mins

• Add something in colored PEN
• Rearrange something by circling it and drawing an
  arrow to where it should go
• Remove something by drawing a line through it
• Replace a boring word with a better one by
  crossing it out and writing above it

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Tool Card 3

• Revise Def.
• I can.

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You revise

• Adding- What else does the reader need to know?
  FIND A PLACE TO ADD TO YOUR WRITING
• Rearranging-Is the information in the most
  logical and most effective order? MOVE
  SOMETHING TO A DIFFERENT PLACE
• Removing-What extra details or unnecessary bits
  of information are in this pieceof writing?
  REMOVE SOMETHING THAT IS UNNECESSARY for the
  story
• Replacing-What words or details could be replaced
  by clearer or stronger expressions? REPLACE A
  BORING WORD WITH A BETTER ONE

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Fri

• Bell Work
• DEAR Reading 10 mins

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Fri 3/13

• Edit
• Publish

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Editing

• Definition making sure your piece has correct
  grammar, spelling, punctuation, mechanics, etc
• What can I edit?
• spelling
• capitalization
• punctuation
• grammar
• sentence structure
• subject/verb agreement
• consistent verb tense
• word usage

• Self Edit Read your own work backwards. Read the
  last sentence, then the secondlast sentence,
  etc. Does each sentence make sense when you
  read it on it's own?  Do you see or hear any
  errors in the sentence?

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• TIPS
• Be sure that every sentence has two parts
  subject (who or what)predicate (what's
  happening)
• Use sentence combining words and, but, or,
  yet, sowho, whom, which, that, whosebecause,
  although, when, if, whereand others

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Tool Card 4

• Edit Def.
• I can.

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Edit your work
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Edit 5 Mins

• Spelling
• Punctuation
• Capitalization
• Run-On/Fragment
• Swap with a partner to look for mistakes
• Read each sentence from the end first
• Circle anything you are unsure of
• Teacher quick check

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Publishing

• Definition typed and final draft of your writing
  ready to be shared with audience
• Type with 12 pt font
• Times New Roman or Arial
• Double space
• Neat margins
• Illustrations
• (special fonts/sizes for special writing)

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Sharing Your Work

• Let others read it
• Read aloud to others
• Post online
• Display on walls or bookshelf

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Tool Card 5

• Publish Def.
• I can.

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Share your work

• Share your work with your table
• Volunteers to share with the class

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SOCIAL
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3/16 No Class

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3/16 No Class Tues 3/17 What are the 5 steps of the writing process? FCAT make up in cafe Diane Oganesova- Mittica Sam Runyon - Mittica Mariko Thompson- Mittica

THIS GOES ON THE BACK OF THE OTHER ONE
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Agenda

• Moodle sign up by thurs code 3131
• Writing Process Quiz on Weds make sure all
  notecards are finished you can use them

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Agenda

• Log Into Moodle
• Search for Mittica in top right search box
• Choose Creative Writing (click the blue part that
  actually says Creative Writing)
• Enrollment Key is 3131

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Writing Process Review

1. Prewriting how can we?
2. Drafting what can we do?
3. Revising what is the key word?
4. Editing what do we look for?
5. Publishing how do we do that?

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Meet the 6 Traits of Quality Writing
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Count out Six Pages and you will label the top of
each we will work on these for the next 6 weeks
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What are the 6 traits?

1. Ideas
2. Organization
3. Voice
4. Word Choice
5. Sentence Fluency
6. Conventions

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Ideas
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Ideas

• The ideas are the heart of the message, the
  content of the piece, the main theme, together
  with the details that enrich and develop that
  theme.

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Ideas
Ideas are the heart of any piece of writing

• Its all about the quality of information
• Ideas paint pictures in a readers mind
• Informational text becomes reader-friendly
• Pay attention to beyond-the-obvious detail
• Ideas demonstrate clarity, focus, sense of
  purpose

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Tool Card 6

• Ideas Definition message/theme
  Details
• I can.
  (list 3 things you can do to make
  sure you have good ideas

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Writing Territories

• Writing Territories things you know about that
  you could write about

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My Writing Territories

• Use the back of the Ideas Page in your notebook
  with this as the title
• list at least 20 things that are important to you
  that you could write about
• Be specific not family buthusband, mom, dad,
  sisters Linda and Kirsten

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My Writing Territories

• My Dog
• Hawaii
• New Orleans
• Disney World
• Wildwood
• Europe
• School/students
• Football Patriots
• Pizza Village
• Seafood shrimp and grouper

1. Playing Wii
2. Clearwater beach
3. Ice skating
4. Friends lake house
5. Husband
6. Sisters
7. My cat
8. Moving away
9. Southside closing
10. Country/rock music

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Tool Card 7

• Writing Def things you know about that
  you could write about
• Territories I can write
  about(list 3 things)

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Share/Exit Pass

• Go over grades
• Share your writing territories with a partner
• Submit on scap paper
• Name
• Topic you might write about with 3 details

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3/16 2nd subbed out Fcat Tues 3/17 What are the 5 steps of the writing process?
Weds 3/18 Would you rather have to write holding a pen with your feet or in your mouth? Explain why
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Agenda

• Sign up for Moodle
• Click schools teachers
• Find southside
• Creative Writing Mittica
• 3131

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Quiz

• Take the quiz
• Dont forget the back
• DEAR when finished

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3/16 Fcat Tues 3/17 What are the 5 steps of the writing process?
Weds 3/18 Would you rather have to write holding a pen with your feet or in your mouth? Explain why Thurs 3/19 (hand in today) 3 2 1 3 things you love 2 things you hate 1 thing you dont understand
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Agenda

• Post in Moodle about todays activity due Monday

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Thurs 3/19

• Ideas challenge
• Most people get stuck on ideas and including
  detail

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Better Ideas

• Clear purpose/reason
• 5 senses detail
• Character feelings
• Character actions
• Character conversation
• Other information
• See examples
• http//senior.billings.k12.mt.us/6traits/content/e
  xamp.htm

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Ideas Challenge

• Choose a topic from your writing territories
• Come up with a PURPOSE for writing about it
• Use 5 senses to describe the topic/event
• Describe a character/person/place involved in the
  topic
• You should have 8 sentences
• HWK type and post it in Moodle

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My Example

• I am going to write about New Orleans because it
  was a really unique vacation and I want to tell
  other people how cool it is.
• New Orleans feels heavy and sultry in the summer
  because the humidity is so high.
• It looks like a constant party and parade all
  rolled into one with costumes and crazy clothing.
• The smells of Cajun food fill your nose, spicy
  rice with shrimp and gator bites.
• The food tastes like a party in your mouth. The
  poboy sandwiches are warm and delicious.
• You can hear the sounds of friends calling from
  balconies and shops trying to get your business.
• One of the most important things about New
  Orleans is that it is haunted, maybe by ghosts or
  just memories.
• You can take a tour to learn about odd people who
  have lived there like an old noble duke who used
  to serve bottled blood at his parties and pretend
  it was wine.
• He was said to be a vampire.

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Zoom
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BELL WORK

• DEAR reading 5 mins

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Fri 3/20

• First Lines Activity

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Agenda

• Post your IDEAS in Moodle make sure you tell
  the Purpose for choosing that topic, 5 senses,
  and describe a character

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First Lines

• Travel around the room and read the first lines
  of some books
• Copy down the first line for one of the
  categories that it fits
• Do not fill in your own example yet

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Own Example

• Use your writing territories
• Come up with a first line in each category that
  you could use you may choose to base your first
  line on different topics from your writing
  territories list

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Mon sub activity

• Bell work on board
• Voice activity
• Share n guess

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Mon 1/12 Sub

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Mon sub Tues 4/7 Make a list (3) of simple things that you know how to do wellfor example Make a PBJ sandwich Send a text message Buy a dress Then DEAR (library)

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Agenda

• Print out story by Thurs
• How did it go with the sub?

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Make tool card for
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Voice
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Voice

• The voice is the heart and soul , the magic, the
  wit, along with the feeling and conviction of the
  individual writing coming out through the words.

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Voice
Voice is personality and confidence

• Individuality and perspective
• Enthusiasm and expressiveness
• Is the author knowledgeable about the topic?
• Does the piece hold the readers attention?
• Is there real passion? Does the author care?
• Does the text reveal a new idea?
• Is the voice appropriate?

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Tool Box

• Voice

• Def
• Ex I can be enthusiastic and passionate.
• I can choose a topic that I know and care about

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What do you know How To do?

• Sleep
• Go shopping
• Change tv channel
• Eat
• Brush teeth
• Send text messages
• Use the bathroom
• Take care of dog
• Flip on a light switch

• Make money
• Make omelet
• Play basketball
• Work on computer
• Snowboard
• Send an e-mail
• Play paintball
• Watch tv
• Drive a boat

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How to Thumb Wrestle

1. Extend your hand like a hand shake
2. Curl your four fingers with your opponents,
   leaving your thumb exposed
3. Criss Cross your thumbs and say One, two, three,
   fourI declare a thumbie war.
4. Attempt to pin down the thumb of the other person
   without moving your arms too much
5. Once you succeed in pinning your opponents
   thumb, declare, one, two, threepin I win to
   end the match

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What is good about this piece of writing?
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Read Article

• What is different in the article from what I
  wrote for directions?
• Which one is better?
• Why?

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Thumb Wrestling Techniques

1. Explains how to prepare by picking on someone
   smaller
2. Drink milk for a milk moustache
3. Suggests cheating if you know the ref or you
   wont get caught
4. Calls on Yoda Jedi mind trick pop culture
5. Cobra spit makes up his own terms
6. Techniques of grabbing knuckle pep talk

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VOICE

• Humor the writer does not take himself too
  seriously
• Gives advice as though it were a real sports
  guide
• References Popular Culture
• Invents terms for Thumb Wrestling Moves
• HOW TO
• Must have expertise/experience

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Simple How-Tos

• Make PBJ/coffee/cereal/mac n cheese/etc
• Throw a football/baseball
• Make a sand castle
• Write an e-mail
• Win a video game
• Play tic-tac-toe

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How to make PBJ

• Step 1 gather bread, pb and jelly, knife, spoon,
  plate
• Some people, known as mixers will just use one
  knife to save on the wash time and put in the pb
  and then the j. this is a crime in some families,
  a federal offense. So be sure you check with the
  boss of the kitchen before you attempt this.
• Step 2 spread the peanut butter on one side of
  bread on the right
• Choosing the slice to start with can be a
  difficult decision to make. You will have to make
  it quickly so your bread doesnt get stale. Note
  always spread the pb on the right or your
  sandwich will taste backwards.
• Step 3 spread the jelly on the bread on the left

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Write your Own How-To

• Make a brainstorm list of the steps (should be
  about 5)
• Expand on each step to include your Voice it
  can be funny, sarcastic, use childhood memories,
  reflect your culture, etc.

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Mon Sub Tues Make a list (3) of simple things that you know how to do wellfor example Make a PBJ sandwich Send a text message Buy a dress
Weds 4/8 Think of opposing pairs for example Cat vs dog Fisherman vs fish Chef vs potatoes Teacher vs student
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Agenda

• Print story by thurs

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Weds 1/14

• BW
• Finish Sharing from yesterday
• Voice in Your Story

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Bell Work Brainstorm Share

• Rays vs sox
• Soda vs juice
• Girls vs boys
• Mom vs dad
• Rain vs snow
• Basketball vs football
• Parents vs child
• Shopper vs credit card
• Longoria vs arod (boooo)
• Gold vs diamond
• Land vs water
• Prey vs predator
• Defense vs offense
• Police vs criminal

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Bell Work Brainstorm Share

• Girl vs boys
• Obama vs mccain
• Fat vs skinny
• Palin vs obama vp
• Cars vs trucks
• Baby vs kids
• Gold vs silver
• Hunter vs deer
• Rap vs classical
• Dolphin vs shark
• Whale vs crill
• Lion vs tiger
• Dollar vs coins
• Duck vs goose
• Sneakers vs heels

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Cat/Dog Diaries

• Voice can come from the perspective of the
  speaker.
• You should be able to tell something about a
  character just from their words on the page.

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Stand up if you have

• A dog share something about your dog
• A cat share something about cats
• Both how are they different from each other?

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• Dog's Diary 800 am - Dog food! My favorite
  thing! 930 am - A car ride! My favorite thing!
  940 am - A walk in the park! My favorite
  thing! 1030 am - Got rubbed and petted! My
  favorite thing! 1200 pm - Lunch! My favorite
  thing! 100 pm - Played in the yard! My
  favorite thing! 300 pm - Wagged my tail! My
  favorite thing! 500 pm - Milk bones! My
  favorite thing! 700 pm - Got to play ball! My
  favorite thing! 800 pm - Wow! Watched TV with
  the people! My favorite thing! 1100 pm -
  Sleeping on the bed! My favorite thing!

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• Cat's diary Day 983 of my captivity. My captors
  continue to taunt me with bizarre little dangling
  objects. They dine lavishly on fresh meat, while
  the other inmates and I are fed hash or some sort
  of dry nuggets. Although I make my contempt for
  the rations perfectly clear, I nevertheless must
  eat something in order to keep up my strength.
  The only thing that keeps me going is my dream of
  escape. In an attempt to disgust them, I once
  again vomit on the carpet. Today I decapitated a
  mouse and dropped its headless body at their
  feet. I had hoped this would strike fear into
  their hearts, since it clearly demonstrates what
  I am capable of. However, they merely made
  condescending comments about what a "good little
  hunter" I am. There was some sort of assembly
  of their accomplices tonight. I was placed in
  solitary confinement for the duration of the
  event. However, I could hear the noises and smell
  the food. I overheard that my confinement was due
  to the power of "allergies." I must learn what
  this means, and how to use it to my advantage.
  Today I was almost successful in an attempt to
  assassinate one of my tormentors by weaving
  around his feet as he was walking. I must try
  this again tomorrow -- but at the top of the
  stairs. I am convinced that the other prisoners
  here are flunkies and snitches. The dog
  receives special privileges. He is regularly
  released - and seems to be more than willing to
  return. He is obviously brainwashed. The bird has
  got to be an informant. I observe him communicate
  with the guards regularly. I am certain that he
  reports my every move. My captors have arranged
  protective custody for him in an elevated cell,
  so he is safe. For now ....

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Class Sample

• Principals Day
• 8 am I need coffee. I have so much to do today.
  I cant wait to see the little children. I cant
  wait to go home later today. I want to go
  golfing.
• 12 pm This is too quiet, something is wrong. I
  am hungry to eat lunch. I want to go to Subway
  instead of eating that gross café food that the
  kids get. I think Ill sit down in my nice chair
  and have a nap.
• 2 pm I hate this place. I have to shower to
  wash off the sloppy joe, potatoes, and some old
  cheese and milk. Can I get this kid expelled some
  how?

• Class Rebels Day
• 8 am How am I going to torture my teachers
  today? Ill just show up late. Should I use pb or
  j for my evil plan to put on the teachers seat?
• 12 pm I am planning a food fight for today. The
  food is disgusting and make perfect ammo. That
  stupid old Principal has no idea what Im about
  to do.
• 2 pm Hahahahha. That was awesome. Finally time
  to go home. Maybe Ill get subway. The principal
  looks like my personal masterpiece.

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Class Sample

• Principals Day
• 8 am I wonder how many detentions I will give
  out today. I just love to get those kids. That
  stupid kid just spit his gum out on campus. I
  need some coffee.
• 12 pm I need to go to the Café and control
  these children so they wont get in a fight. I am
  so hungry. I want a nice sandwich to eat. Maybe I
  should lose some weight. That kid just got
  punched in the face. Now I get to give a
  detention.
• 2 pm Hallelujah, I get to go home. I didnt
  give enough detentions. It was a usual day. But
  the food fight was horrible, I got food all over
  me.

• Class Rebels Day
• 8 am I just spit my gum out on the lawn and now
  Im listening to my ipod on the way into class.
  Im late as always. I need to get some Red Bull
  for today. Im going to put a tack on a teachers
  seat and what else can I do to annoy them?
• 12 pm This kid is really getting on my nerves.
  I should punch him in the face. I am going to
  steal a cookie for some sugar before I start a
  food fight. This is going to be fun.
• 2 pm I am going to go find someone to bully to
  collect money. What a great day. I should do this
  again tomorrow.

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Class Sample

• Principals Day
• 8 am The students are starting to arrive. The
  bell is about to ring. Another day in this
  deathtrap.
• 10 am I gave a detention to Marbro for writing
  profanity on the teachers desk. I love giving
  detentions it brightens up my day. I wish I
  could just kick out these troublemakers.
• Noon At lunch there was a food fight. Marbro
  started it. I got hit in the face with a
  hamburger and then a chicken wing. I was so glad
  that now I have a chance to kick him out. I feel
  sorry for the janitor. I think the kids should
  clean it up.
• 2 pm I feel relieved at the end of the day
  because the little rats have left for the day.
  After work I will go home and cry myself to
  sleep. I have to also send a text message to my
  grandma.

• Class Rebels Day
• 8 am I head to school, after planning the most
  horrible day for the principal. I dont
  understand why hes always watching. I arrive
  late because I felt like it. I had to stop for a
  2 for 2 McMuffin deal.
• 10 am I hate that teacher. I decided to
  decorate her desk for her with some colorful
  language. Ill just add that detention to the
  pile I dont care. I am working on a world
  record.
• Noon At lunch I yelled out, food fight
  because I saw that kid I dont like and I threw a
  chicken wing at him. That kid tried to eat it
  then threw it again and it hit Mr. Principal.
  That was the best food fight ever. It was
  awesome.
• 2 pm On my way home I start to plan to destroy
  the principals office tomorrow.

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Choose a Character Event

• You will need to really get to know your
  character in order for his/her voice to show in
  the story
• Brainstorm some information about your main
  character in your story
• It might be you or a fictional character

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What is your characters?

• Name
• Physical description
• Personality traits
• Age
• Location (setting, hometown, school)
• Favorite Foods
• Favorite Music
• Favorite Color
• Favorite Movie
• Favorite Book
• Favorite Vacation location

• Favorite Sports teams
• Best friends
• Worst life experience
• Best life experience
• Most embarrassing moment
• Family members
• Dream for the future
• Opinion of self
• Myspace page design
• Best school subjects

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Choose from your story

• Write about an event from the perspective of your
  main character and then choose an opposite
• Describe a day in the life of your character
• Think about how the world looks

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Mon Sub Tues Make a list (3) of simple things that you know how to do wellfor example Make a PBJ sandwich Send a text message Buy a dress
Weds 4/8 Think of opposing pairs for example Cat vs dog Fisherman vs fish Chef vs potatoes Teacher vs student Thurs 4/9 Who is your favorite movie/book/tv character? Why (3 detailed reasons)
Hand in 8 bell works today
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Thurs

• BW
• POV
• http//senior.billings.k12.mt.us/6traits/voice/rub
  ric.htm

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2 Tool cards

• The narrator tells the story
• The can be different types of narrators

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POINT OF VIEW

• First Person I, me, my
• Ex. I went to the gym. I felt so tired after. I
  saw Jess on my way home.
• Second Person uncommon, command, speak directly
  to the reader you
• Ex. You must get me the golden cup. Only you can
  do it.
• Third Person like watching from the corner, 3rd
  wheel they, he, she, them
• Ex. The kids walked down the street. Two were
  talking while a third listened to music.

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3rd Person

• Limited Narrator can see actions of all
  characters but only the thoughts/feelings of one
  or two
• Ex. Tracy was walking down the hall thinking
  about her test and feeling worried. Jim slammed
  his locker and started to walk next to her.
• Omniscient Narrator can see all actions and
  knows all thoughts/feelings of all characters
• Ex. Tracy was thinking about her test and felt
  worried. Jim walked next to her, thinking about
  their date that night, hoping it would go well.

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Look at Examples online

• Fill in Voice on own rubric

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Finish from yesterday
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How will you use this?

• In your own story
• Try to make a very clear voice for one of your
  characters
• Include the little details that your character
  would do, say, notice, wear, etc. so that when I
  read your story, I will feel like I know your
  character.

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Spongebob

• 8am wake up cheerful and say Im ready Im
  ready
• 5 minutes later feed gary and dump it all in
  and add sugar
• 10 am arrive at work and compliment Squidward
  even though he has a scowl
• 12pm make crabby patties and do something to
  get mr krabs mad

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What is your characters?

• Name
• Physical description
• Personality traits
• Age
• Location (setting, hometown, school)
• Favorite Foods
• Favorite Music
• Favorite Color
• Favorite Movie
• Favorite Book
• Favorite Vacation location

• Favorite Sports teams
• Best friends
• Worst life experience
• Best life experience
• Most embarrassing moment
• Family members
• Dream for the future
• Opinion of self
• Myspace page design
• Best school subjects

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Choose a Character Event

• You will need to really get to know your
  character in order for his/her voice to show in
  the story
• Brainstorm some information about your main
  character in your story
• It might be you or a fictional character

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Bell Work DEAR

• Get out AGENDA
• Revise DRAFT 2 over weekend make revisions in
  MOODLE hi-light 5 changes or put them in a
  different color when you type
• Due Mon
• I will read them and make comments and youll
  revise and edit for you final draft next week

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Friday

• Peer Revise/Edit

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REMIND ME

• Go over missing grades

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Peer Edit/Revise

• Have three other students read your work
• Put your paper on your table
• Go to a different table and choose a story to
  read
• Make positive and negative comment
• Move again to a new paper when I tell you to

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Mon 4/13 Explain one revision you made this weekend on your piece DEAR 10 mins

hand in Mall Voice activity from Sub Diane,
Gerard, Temple - bell work
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Agenda

• Study for quiz
• Final piece due in Moodle with all revisions by
  Thurs 4/16

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Mon

• Bell Work
• Quiz Review

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Quiz Review

• Parts of a short story
• Conflict
• Ideas
• Paragraphs
• Flashback
• Voice

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Fill in Planning Guide

• Ideas
• Organization
• Voice
• Plans for final revisions

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Word Choice
Word Choice
How exquisite!
Sounds scrumptious!
Listen to the serene stillness...
A breath of fresh air
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Word Choice

• Word choice is the use of rich, colorful, precise
  language that moves and enlightens the reader.

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Word Choice
Word choice is clear, precise and colorful

• Find the word that is just right
• Stretch to use new, interesting words
• Think verbs, verbs, verbs (high energy words)
• Eliminate over-used words
• Cut the fat only use words that carry their
  own weight

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Make Tool Card

• Word Choice

• Def
• Ex. I can use new and interesting words and words
  that are just right.

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Mon 4/13 Explain one revision you made this weekend on your piece DEAR 10 mins Tues 4/14 What is one question you have before we take the quiz?

last call for sub voice activity
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Agenda

• Final piece due in Moodle with all revisions by
  Thurs 4/16

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Tues

• Quiz
• DEAR when finished

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Mon 4/13 Explain one revision you made this weekend on your piece DEAR 10 mins Tues 4/14 What is one question you have before we take the quiz?
Weds 4/15 DEAR 5 mins Find 2 boring words Find 2 interesting words In your dear book
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Agenda

• Final piece due in Moodle with all revisions by
  Thurs 4/16 follow my suggestions

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Word Choice
Word Choice
How exquisite!
Sounds scrumptious!
Listen to the serene stillness...
A breath of fresh air
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Word Choice

• Word choice is the use of rich, colorful, precise
  language that moves and enlightens the reader.

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Word Choice
Word choice is clear, precise and colorful

• Find the word that is just right
• Stretch to use new, interesting words
• Think verbs, verbs, verbs (high energy words)
• Eliminate over-used words
• Cut the fat only use words that carry their
  own weight

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Make Tool Card

• Word Choice

• Def
• Ex. I can use new and interesting words and words
  that are just right.

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SFMS

• Use ONLY these four letters in order to make as
  many sentences as you can.
• For example
• Some frogs might swim.
• Silly, funny, Mexican salsa. (not sentence)

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Best

• Temple Salamander Frank made space.
• Joe Sad farmers mostly swim.
• Silly fish make silly-string.
• Tony Smelly fat Mexicans sing.
• Kara Secret flies might surrender.
• Shy familiar mice showed-off.
• Killian D Salutations frighten mighty
  super-sleuths.
• Jerome Someone find my salsa.
• KM Spider finds many scraps.
• Superman find mexican salsa.
• Hannah Stupid frogs make soup.
• Salmon feeds Mexican students.
• Demetria Sensational fishes muzzled seaweed.
• Savory franks melted satisfyingly.
• Gerard Stop freakishly man-eating snakes.

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Best

• Sam Sam farts mysterious signs.
• Sam fought many salamanders.
• Jesse Seans fingers melt sometimes.
• Joe Super ferrets move sand.
• Super ferrets must soar.
• Twinkie Sidney find my swag.
• Sidney finds missing secrets.
• Christian - Sometimes failure means strength.
• Some foods might smell.
• Sad farmers might sigh.
• Jairus Sally fought many snakes.
• Super farts may smell.
• Sometimes fat monkeys sing.
• Smelly flowers must stink. brian
• Regal Someones feeling my shoe.
• Syd Secret falling models snare.

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Share

• Super frogs move speedily.
• Some fish might stink.
• Sometime friends might sleep.

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Why did we do this?

• Each word matters.
• You have to choose carefully to make a sentence
  that makes sense.
• Each sentence needs to have a subject and a
  predicate.

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PRECISE

• http//www.ncistudent.net/StudySkills/WritingSkill
  s/Thes.htm
• Act Out
• Limped, strode, sneaked, toddled, paced, rambled,
  tramped, shuffled, plodded, strutted, strolled,
  stomped, stamped, hobbled, marched, sauntered,
  prowled.
• Number 1 9 and put the word you chose and why

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Game I need actors
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Mon 4/13 Explain one revision you made this weekend on your piece DEAR 10 mins Tues 4/14 What is one question you have before we take the quiz?
Weds 4/15 DEAR 5 mins Find 2 boring words Find 2 interesting words In your dear book Thurs 4/16 What is the best thing about your piece? What is the worst thing about your piece?
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No homework

• Take out your planning guide
• Make sure it is filled in
• Table Rep collect and make sure names are on all
  of them

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Thurs

• Share Day
• Please volunteer to share your piece if you
  dont then I will volunteer you
• If there is a reason you cannot share, please
  talk to me about it
• If your piece is very long, share the first few
  pages and if we have time we will come back to you

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Comment Sheet

• Write everyones name on your paper make one
  comment about each persons piece after you hear
  it
• I will be collecting this so be helpful and
  appropriate

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Names
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Names
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Part of Speech Definition Examples
Noun Person, Place, Thing, Idea names something Cat, love, Sarah
Pronoun Used to replace a noun stands for it without naming it I , we, him, she
Verb Action word or state of being Am, was, are, is
Adverb Describes a VERB or ADJECTIVE says how something is, or when Quickly, lazily, swiftly
Adjective Describes a noun or pronoun Ugly, soft, yellow
Conjunction Connects two words, phrases, or clauses And, but, so
Preposition Indicates location/time relationship between objects and sentence Under, around, in, later, before, after
Interjection Word added to convey emotion often includes exclamation point WOW, Whoppee, Yippee
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If we finish sharing

• DEAR

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FRI 4/17

• BELLWORK DEAR 10 mins

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Fri

• Finish any unread stories
• Pre-Write and Draft new piece of writing

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Just when you thought you were done

• Now that you have gotten warmed up, its time to
  really get writing
• Go back to your writing territories
• What else can you write about?
• Why dont you try a new format it is national
  poetry month!

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Mon 4/20 DEAR 10 mins Find 3 interesting words in your story

Sign up for ATL trip for HWK
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Agenda

• Word Choice homework due Weds

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Mon 4/20

• Anyone who didnt share do you want to??
• Notes

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Part of Speech Definition Examples
Noun Person, Place, Thing, Idea names something Cat, love, Sarah
Pronoun Used to replace a noun stands for it without naming it I , we, him, she
Verb Action word or state of being Am, was, are, is
Adverb Describes a VERB or ADJECTIVE says how something is, or when Quickly, lazily, swiftly
Adjective Describes a noun or pronoun Ugly, soft, yellow
Conjunction Connects two words, phrases, or clauses And, but, so
Preposition Indicates location/time relationship between objects and sentence Under, around, in, later, before, after
Interjection Word added to convey emotion often includes exclamation point WOW, Whoppee, Yippee
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Ways to Better Word Choice
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Nouns

• Dont always start the sentence with a noun
• The family went to the movies yesterday. ? On the
  way to the movies yesterday, the family decided
  what to see. ? Yesterday, the family went to the
  movies.
• Be specific/use names
• the burger place ? McDonalds
• some animals ? Four cats and one dog
• my friend and I ? Joanna and I

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Verbs

• Describe the action to fit the mood
• The girl cried ? the girl sobbed or the girl
  sniffled back tears
• Use more than one verb
• The bunnies hopped across the meadow ? The
  bunnies hopped and danced across the meadow

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Adjectives

• Use 2 or 3
• My red car was all smashed up ? My shiny, new,
  red car was all smashed up or My dusty, old, red
  car was all smashed up
• Use a thesaurus to find better/specific words
• The sunset was bright pink and deep blue ? The
  sunset was magenta and indigo

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Adverbs

• Use ly words to describe actions
• She walked to the store ? she walked quickly to
  the store, she walked lazily to the store
• Put them in different places
• The boy sloppily devoured the pizza ? Sloppily,
  the boy devoured the pizza ? The boy devoured the
  pizza sloppily

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Word Choice Strategies

• Use a paper Thesaurus look up a boring word and
  replace it with a better one
• Use MS Word Thesaurus/synonym to find a better
  word
• Use http//thesaurus.reference.com/

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Simple sentence

• Bob went to the market.
• Bob went to Publix. (n more specific)
• Bob skipped to Publix (v mood)
• Brown haired Bob skipped to Publix (adj 2)
• Brown haired Bob happily skipped to Publix (adv
  use ly)

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Write a simple sentence

• The kid ran.
• The little boy ran. (noun more specific)
• The little boy sprinted. (verb mood)
• The midget boy sprinted. (adj specific)
• The midget boy quickly sprinted. (adv ly)

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JoBros Re-Write

• Use each of the 3 types of thesaurus to replace
  the hi-lighted words in the Jonas Brothers' song.
• Paper
• MS Word
• Internet
• Any volunteers to sing??

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Mon 4/20 DEAR 10 mins Find 3 interesting words in your story Tues 4/21 Look at your three words from yesterdays bell work what is the part of speech of each word? Noun, verb, adverb, adjective, conjunction, interjection, preposition, pronoun

I need to check off yellow paper for ATL
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Agenda

• Word Choice practice due Weds

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Tues last day MP5

• Jo Bros
• Fun with sentences

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Word Choice Strategies

• Use a paper Thesaurus look up a boring word and
  replace it with a better one
• Use MS Word Thesaurus/synonym to find a better
  word
• Use http//thesaurus.reference.com/

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JoBros Re-Write

• Use each of the 3 types of thesaurus to replace
  the hi-lighted words in the Jonas Brothers' song.
• Paper
• MS Word
• Internet
• Any volunteers to sing??

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Fun with Sentences
Find out your grade from me!

• Choose a tile from each of the four bags
• Use the single word on the front and the better
  word choice words on the back to write 3
  different sentences that all say the same thing!
• 4 pts per sentence X 3 12 pts classwork

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• I felt vulnerable when I was quickly thrown in
  jail.
• I felt defenseless when I was swiftly cast into
  prison.
• I felt weak when I was speedily dashed into the
  clink.

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Choose A Letter

1. A
2. B
3. C
4. D
5. E
6. F
7. G
8. H
9. J
10. K

• L
• M
• N
• O
• P
• R
• S
• T
• V
• W

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Think of a word that starts with your letter

• Noun
• Verb
• Adverb
• Adj

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Create 4 Word Cards include the word and its
part of speech

• 1 Noun find a basic noun starting with your
  letter find 3 other ways to say it (ex Cat
  Siamese, tiger, feline)
• 1 Verb find a verb with your letter use a
  thesaurus if necessary to find 3 other ways to
  say it (ex Talk scream, whisper, converse)
• 1 Adverb find an adverb with your letter use
  a thesaurus if necessary to find 3 other ways to
  say it (ex quickly rapidly, hastily, fast)
• 1 Adjective - find an adjective with your letter
  use a thesaurus if necessary to find 3 other
  ways to say it (ex pretty beautiful,
  appealing, attractive)

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Mon 4/20 DEAR 10 mins Find 3 interesting words in your story Tues 4/21 Look at your three words from yesterdays bell work what is the part of speech of each word? Noun, verb, adverb, adjective, conjunction, interjection, preposition, pronoun
Weds 4/22 Re-Write this sentence with better word choice I saw a small colorful object outside the window.
Final Marking Period!
homework on desk
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Weds

• Review Word Choice Homework hand it in
• Hand in sentences from yesterday
• Drafting piece 2
• Return 1st piece
• Handout What will you improve (use first rubric)

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Mon 4/20 DEAR 10 mins Find 3 interesting words in your story Tues 4/21 Look at your three words from yesterdays bell work what is the part of speech of each word? Noun, verb, adverb, adjective, conjunction, interjection, preposition, pronoun
Weds 4/22 Re-Write this sentence with better word choice I saw a small colorful object outside the window. Thurs 4/23 DEAR Write a short sentence from your DEAR book Write a long sentence from your DEAR book
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BW

• Please get him.
• Do you miss it?
• He nodded.
• Do you see them?
• So?

• Bob gave some final instructions, hung up and
  strode from one phone to the other.
• Not many people get every single thing they want
  plus all the things they didnt think to ask for
  in the same day.
• I felt struck surrounded by wild things that were
  circling around me waving their arms snarling
  their jaws so there was no way out.

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BW

• She stands up.
• Faint heart, she chided him.
• Poor kid.
• Maybe some poor child now.

• Armored knight dragged Aja through the black
  gates of the castle down a long echoing corridor
  and into a huge but nearly empty room.
• Eragon struggled into the items a billowy white
  shirt with ties at the cuffs, a red vest
  decorated with gold braiding and embroidery dark
  pants shiny black boots that clacked on the floor
  and a swirling cape that fastened under this
  throat with a studded brooch.
• I found a very stable looking rock on the fringe
  of one of the largest pools and sat there
  cautiously spellbound by the natural aquarium.

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Sentence Fluency
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Sentence Fluency

• Sentence fluency is the rhythm and flow of the
  language, the sound of word patterns, the way in
  which the writing plays to the earnot just to
  the eye.

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Sentence Fluency
The rhythm and flow of the sentences

• Sounds soothing to the ear
• A variety of sentence length and structure
• Text begs to be read aloud
• Smooth transitions support fluency
• Punctuation is key. Periods are a good thing!

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What is a sentence?

• Subject (includes the noun/thing)
• Predicate (verb/action and rest of sentence)
• Object (other nouns/things in sentence but NOT
  the main subject/topic)
• Samson hit the ball. (Samson is subject, hi