Elaboration

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Elaboration
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What is elaboration?

• Telling the reader more by using specific words,
  extensions (phrases and clauses), onion-like
  layering, or specific strategies.
• Showing rather than telling.

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Types of elaboration
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Most Important Type of Elaboration

• Evidence text based details using quotes
  directly from the text to support the overall
  thesis or claim in a piece of writing.
• Commentary explanation of the way the facts,
  details and/or examples in a paragraph or essay
  support the topic sentence.

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Other types of

• ELABORATION STRATEGIES
• As we go along, please copy the definition of
  each strategy next to the term given in your
  writing notes (focus on the blue text).

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Examples

• Provide specific information about an idea
• Common transition words to use for example, for
  instance
• Demonstrates what you mean
• Defines the main topic of paragraph

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For Example

• For example, he constantly goes through my video
  games without permission and never puts them
  away, leaving them spread out like litter on the
  floor. Also, he bites me for no reason leaving
  deep puncture marks.

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Descriptions

• Are ways to create vivid images for the reader
  (5 senses).
• Paints a picture in our head
• Think imagery

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Description Example

• The coffee hung on his breath like fog on a
  Seattle morning, that burnt rubber smell burnt my
  nostrils and tickled my taste buds all at the
  same time.

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TRUE Statistics and TRUE Facts WITH EVIDENCE

• Numbers (data) and information that help support
  your thesis or claim.
• Cannot be fake (must be real)
• RESEARCH BASED
• TEXT BASED EVIDENCE

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Fact Example Add what is needed to your example
paragraph.

• A recent magazine article that I read, The Truth
  about Smoking, written by Dr. Paul Reskin stated
  Almost a quarter of high school students are
  smokers by the time they graduate. And roughly
  one third of all teenage smokers will eventually
  have a smoking related disease.

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REAL Quotations

• Words that someone says that can help support
  your idea or argument.
• Cannot be fake (must be real)
• Use quotation marks correctly.

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For Example

• If you break it, youll be buying a new one,
  she yells. Then she goes on to say, if I hear
  it again, youll be grounded.

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Anecdotes (self-story STORY ABOUT ME)

• Short personal stories inserted into an essay
  that help develop a thesis or claim.
• Make it interesting
• The only time writing could be fake (why?
  Because we wont know if it is really true or
  not)

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Anecdote Example

• I even remember a time when there were so many
  people jam-packed in the hall, that a friend of
  mine got pushed down and hurt her hand. Another
  time I was almost hit in the face by a door
  because there was nowhere to move out of the way.

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Definitions

• Are restatements of unfamiliar words or phrases
  to tell what they mean.
• Can use a dictionary make sure to write as a
  sentence
• Or if it is something only you know about, you
  define it.

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Definition example

• In my sport, soccer, a select team practices year
  round and competes in tournaments all over the
  region. You must try out to be on a select team,
  meaning it is made up of only the best, most
  premier players.

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In your Cornell notes section add this

• E Evidence examples
• 5 Use of Sensory (sight, sound, smell, taste
  and touch)
• S Statistics and facts
• Q quotes
• A Anecdotes
• D Descriptions, details, definitions

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My Own Example It always rains in Seattle

• Now you write elaborations for the prompt above.
  Be unique!
• Be ready to share one tomorrow.
• Evidence Example
• Komo4 News provides great weather reports, but I
  can imagine they get bored always saying, It
  always rains in Seattle.