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• Recap from last time (quick quiz)

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• "Data doesn't lie, but in raw form, it often
  doesn't speak clearly, either."
• "Data don't lie, but in raw form, they often
  don't speak clearly, either."

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• "Data doesn't lie, but in raw form, it often
  doesn't speak clearly, either."
• "Data don't lie, but in raw form, they often
  don't speak clearly, either."
• (Choice A was the tag line on the webpage of a
  math software company!)

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• A. The war profoundly affected her views.
• B. The war profoundly effected her views.

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• A. The war profoundly affected her views.
• B. The war profoundly effected her views.

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• A. The affects of the war were devastating.
• B. The effects of the war were devastating.

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• A. The affects of the war were devastating.
• B. The effects of the war were devastating.

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• A. The psychiatrist found the patients effect
  worrisome.
• B. The psychiatrist found the patients affect
  worrisome.

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• A. The psychiatrist found the patients effect
  worrisome.
• B. The psychiatrist found the patients affect
  worrisome.

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• A. She resolved to affect a change in the
  healthcare system.
• B. She resolved to effect a change in the
  healthcare system.

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• A. She resolved to affect a change in the
  healthcare system.
• B. She resolved to effect a change in the
  healthcare system.

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• A. The negotiators effected an agreement.
• B. The negotiators affected an agreement.

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• A. The negotiators effected an agreement.
• B. The negotiators affected an agreement.

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• A. While she waited to be seen in the ER, her
  personal effects were stolen.
• B. While she waited to be seen in the ER, her
  personal affects were stolen.

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• A. While she waited to be seen in the ER, her
  personal effects were stolen.
• B. While she waited to be seen in the ER, her
  personal affects were stolen.

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• A. The bacteria that I was trying to grow died.
• B. The bacteria which I was trying to grow died.

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• A. The bacteria that I was trying to grow died.
• B. The bacteria which I was trying to grow died.

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• A. There is limited data.
• B. There are limited data.

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• A. There is limited data.
• B. There are limited data.

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• A. The car, which I didnt particularly like,
  finally died.
• B. The car, that I didnt particularly like,
  finally died.

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• A. The car, which I didnt particularly like,
  finally died.
• B. The car, that I didnt particularly like,
  finally died.

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• A. He owed over 1000 to the doctor.
• B. He owed more than 1000 to the doctor.

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• A. He owed over 1000 to the doctor.
• B. He owed more than 1000 to the doctor.

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• A. Her dresses werent worth very much compared
  with her shoes.
• B. Her dresses werent worth very much compared
  to her shoes.

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• A. Her dresses werent worth very much compared
  with her shoes.
• B. Her dresses werent worth very much compared
  to her shoes.

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Scientific Writing, HRP 214 HOMEWORK ANSWERS

• HOMEWORK ANSWERS
• Many possibilities, of course! Here are my
  suggestions..

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• 1. The terms genetic predisposition and
  susceptibility are not entirely satisfactory
  terms because they are not independent concepts,
  but we use the terms to distinguish the extent of
  increased risk that arise from the inherited
  genetic alterations, calling very high individual
  risk, predisposition, and lower risk,
  susceptibility.

What were your rewrites?
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• My rewrite
• We call inherited genetic alterations genetic
  predisposition if they confer a very high risk
  of disease and genetic susceptibility if they
  confer a lower risk.

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• 2. Certain etiologic factors might be more
  likely to lead to certain types of molecular
  changes, so defining tumors based on molecular
  changes might lead to formation of more
  etiologically homogeneous subsets of tumors than
  are apparent solely through histologic
  categories.

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• My rewrite
• Tumors caused by a particular environmental or
  genetic factor undergo predictable molecular
  changes thus, classifying tumors by molecular
  rather than histologic changes may give more
  etiologically homogenous subsets.

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• 3. It is interesting to note that the new
  organism is green in color, round in shape, 5x10
  mm in size, and active with respect to motility.

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• My rewrite
• The new organism is green, round, 5x10 mm long,
  and mobile.

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• 4.In view of the fact that solar energy is not
  yet fully developed at the present time, we will
  have to continue utilizing fossil fuels well into
  the next century.

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• My rewrite
• Because solar energy is underdeveloped, we will
  have to use fossil fuels into the next century.

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Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK
1. Adjacent to near   2. Assuming that
if   3. Big in size big   4. Clearly evident
evident   5. Demonstrate show   6. Doctorate
degree doctorate  
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7. Disseminate send out, distribute   8.
Endeavor (verb) try   9. Evaluate test   10.
Finalize finish   11. Facility office,
plant   12. Have an effect on affect
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13. Has no lacks   14. New development
development   15. In order to to   16. It is
probable that probably   17. Terminate
end   18. Total number number   19. Utilize
use   20. With regard to about, regarding
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Scientific Writing, HRP 214WARM-UP
On a scrap of paper, revise Clinically and
pathologically, a focal neurologic deficit may be
considered a stroke if that deficit is thought to
be caused by a local disturbance affecting the
cerebral circulation. ? A stroke is a focal
neurologic deficit caused by a local disturbance
in cerebral circulation.
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• Lecture Two News Writing
• News writing
• News-writing is the art of maximizing
  information and minimizing words its the
  barest-bones form of writing. The fundamentals
  of good writing can be learned by dissecting news
  articles.

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• When you write news, you are trying to inform
  your reader in the quickest, most interesting way
  possible.

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• What scientific writers can learn from
  journalists
• That a clear, succinct, informative writing style
  is best and
• That holding your readers attention matters!

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• What scientific writers can learn from
  journalists
• That a clear, succinct, informative writing style
  is best and
• That holding your readers attention matters!

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• That a clear, succinct, informative writing style
  is best and
• We were introduced to many of these principles
  last time.

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• Writing in news style
• ? Just the facts, Maam.

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• Some principles of news writing
• Dont use a complicated word when a simple one
  will do.
• Avoid jargon, clichés, and euphemisms.
• Dont cram too much into one sentence.
• Avoid redundancy and repetition.
• Use active verbs and follow the usual
  conversational flow of words
• Use facts, not opinion.
• Be specific.

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• Some principles of news writing
• Dont use a complicated word when a simple one
  will do.
• ?see last weeks lesson.
• Did anyone count average number of letters per
  word in the newspaper?

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This is a single sentence

• Because septin filaments mark the site for
  cytokinesis, and because there is a specific cell
  cycle checkpoint that monitors the state of
  septin filament assembly, that we also discovered
  such knowledge may allow, ultimately, the
  development of therapeutic agents and clinically
  valuable strategies, on the one hand, to impose a
  permanent checkpoint arrest as a means of halting
  the growth of malignant cells in various cancers,
  including breast cancer, and, on the other, to
  overcome such checkpoints to re-activate
  proliferation of quiescent differentiated cells
  (for example, to stimulate multiplication of the
  residual beta-cells in patients suffering from
  Type 1 diabetes as a means to repopulate the
  pancreatic islets with insulin-producing cells).

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• Some principles of news writing
• Avoid jargon, clichés, and euphemisms.

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• Avoid clichés like the plague

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• Euphemisms
• accept the resignation of
• economically disadvantaged
• limited success
• pre-owned
• underachiever
• expire
• collateral damage

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• Collateral damage is one of those antiseptic
  sounding euphemisms that are sometimes more
  chilling than plain language, so hard do they
  labor to conceal their human meaning.--Hendrik
  Hertzberg in the New Yorker

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• Some principles of news writing
• Dont cram too much into one sentence.
• Avoid redundancy and repetition.

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• Did anyone count average words per sentence in
  the newspaper?
• Average number of sentences per paragraph?
• How do you think it compares to a scientific
  article?

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• In news writing, all needless words are
  eliminated.
• For example, that and on are often
  eliminated
• The meeting happened on Monday.
• The meeting happened Monday.
• They agreed that it was true.
• They agreed it was true.

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• Avoid using two or more words that mean the same
  thing (redundancy).
• The hero begins to behave strangely and in odd
  ways following his tryst with a witch he meets
  secretly at midnight.
• ?
• The hero begins to behave strangely following
  his tryst with a witch he meets secretly at
  midnight.

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• Do not repeat a word unless you need it again
  for clarity or emphasis (i.e., avoid repetition)
• When he was a student, his favorite classes were
  the classes that gave no homework.
• ?
• When he was a student, his favorite classes were
  those that gave no homework.
• When he was a student, his favorite classes gave
  no homework.

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• Caveat Keep your sentences short but not too
  short that they are choppy.
• Example (from Successful Science Writing)
• Two canine cadaveers with orthopedic
  abnormalities were identified. The first dog had
  an unusual deformity. It was secondary to
  premature closure of the distal ulnar physis.
  The second dog had a hypertrophic nonunion of the
  femur. The radius and femur of both dogs were
  harvested. They were cleaned of soft tissue.
• News writers use the dash, semicolon, and
  colon to merge choppy sentences together (well
  learn how craft deft sentences with these tools
  next time).

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• Use active verbs and follow the usual
  conversational flow of words
• Write with nouns and verbs

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• Recall from last time
• Subject verb object
• Subject verb object
• Subject verb X

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• KEY LESSON OF NEWS WRITING
• The active voice vs. the passive voice.
• Well see this again and again and again

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• Recall from last time
• In passive-voice sentences, the subject is acted
  upon the subject doesnt act.
• Passive verb a form of the verb to be the
  past participle of the main verb
• The main verb must be a transitive verb (that is,
  take an object).

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• In the passive voice,
• The agent is AWOL Sin and Syntax
• e.g. Mistakes were made.
• ?Nobody is responsible.
• vs. The President made mistakes

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• How do you recognize the passive voice?
• Object-Verb-Subject
• OR just
• Object-Verb The agent is truly AWOL!

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• Examples
• Passive
• My first visit to Boston will always be
  remembered by me.

Active I will always remember my first visit to
Boston.
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• To turn the passive voice back to the active
  voice
• Ask "Who does what to whom?"

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• Examples
• Passive
• The prognosis is largely determined by the
  extent of the injury.

Active The extent of injury determines the
prognosis.
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• Examples
• Passive
• The behavior of the mutant mice was researched
  in many studies.

Active Many studies researched the behavior
of the mutant mice.
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• It was found that 11 does not equal 2.
• The agent found that 11 does not equal 2.
• It was concluded that the data were bogus.
• The agent concluded that the data were bogus.
• It is believed that the data had been falsified.
• The agent believed that the data had been
  falsified.
• A recommendation was made by the DSMB committee
  that the study be halted.
• The DSMB committee recommended that the study be
  halted.
• As is shown in Table 3
• Table 3 shows
•  

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• MYTH The passive voice is more objective.
• Its not more objective, just more vague.
• Activeclaiming responsibility

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Passive To study DNA repair mechanics, this
study on hamster cell DNA was carried out. More
objective? No! More confusing! ? Active To
study DNA repair mechanics, we carried out this
study on hamster cell DNA.
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Passive Major differences in the reaction times
of the two study subjects were found. ? Active We
found major differences in the reaction times of
the two study subjects.
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Passive Migraine was defined as a headache that
lasts for more than 1 hour. ? Active We defined
migraine as a headache that lasts for more than 1
hour.
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The Active Voice is direct, vigorous, natural,
and informative.
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• A note about breaking the rules
• Most writing rules are guidelines, not laws, and
  can be broken when the occasion calls for it.

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• For example, sometimes it is appropriate to use
  the passive voice.
• When the action of the sentence is more important
  than who did it (e.g., materials and methods)
• Three liters of fluid is filtered through
  porous glass beads.
• To emphasize someone or something other than the
  agent that performed the action
• The Obamas were honored at the banquet.
• When the subject is unknown
• The professor was assaulted in the hallways
  they do not know the perpetrator of this heinous
  crime.

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• STRONG VERBS carry the main idea of the sentence
  and sweep the reader along
• Put your sentences on a to be diet
• Is are was were be been am

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• There are many ways in which we can arrange the
  Petri dishes.
• ?We can arrange the Petri dishes many ways. 
• There was a long line of bacteria on the plate.
• ?Bacteria lined the plate.

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• Again, this doesnt mean never use to beit has
  a distinct purpose in the English language
• Just use it purposefully and sparingly.
• The logic was perverse.
• ..and a few months later the Spanish Empire was
  gone.

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• And
• Use facts, not opinion.
• Be specific.
• (applies equally well to scientific writing)

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• Watch out for loaded words (which suggest an
  opinion)
• savage, primitive, conniving, lazy,
  superstitious, wily, crafty, docile, backward,
  bitter, pompous, working class, communist,
  eco-freak, others?

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• Be specific
• Police arrested Willie Deeds, an elderly man,
  after he used a note to rob the bank earlier this
  year.
• Police arrested Willie Deeds, 72, after he used a
  note to rob the bank in January.

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• Take out a scrap of paper and
• make this sentence more newsworthy
• President Hennessy remarked that housing
  opportunities that are attractively priced for
  students are being researched by the university
  currently.

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• How about
• President Hennessy said that the university is
  seeking affordable student housing.

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• What scientific writers should learn from
  journalists?
• That a clear, succinct, informative writing style
  is best and
• That holding your readers attention matters.

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• From The joys and pains of writing, Le Bon
  Journal
• My professor friend told me that in his
  academic world, publish or perish is really
  true. He doesnt care if nobody reads it or
  understands it as long as its published.
• Theres a hint of truth here, nest-ce pas?

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• News writers follow these tactics
• 1. Tell a story
• 2. Put things into context
• e.g., numerical, historical
• 3. Focus on people
• 4. Ask Would my grandmother care?

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• These tactics might also improve scientific
  writing
• Can we tell it more like a story?
• Can we add a bit of history?
• Can we emphasize the most important aspects up
  high and add details later?

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• An aside (broadening our horizons prep for the
  homework)
• Some additional things youd learn if you were
  taking a news writing class

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• What makes stories newsworthy (developing news
  judgment)?
• Impacts lots of people
• Breaking news
• Timeliness
• Prominence
• Proximity
• Conflict
• Trends (3 things make a trend)
• Humor/Surprise

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• Inverted pyramid style
• Place the most important facts at the beginning
  and work "down" from there. The rest of the
  article explains and expands on the beginning.
• A good approach is to assume that the story might
  be cut off at any point due to space limits. Does
  the story work if we only include the first two
  paragraphs? If not, re-arrange it so that it
  does.

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Inverted pyramid style
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• Crucial Information
• Recall The Five "W"s and the "H"
• Who? What? Where? When? Why? How?Any good news
  story provides answers to each of these
  questions.

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• News stories follows a basic formula (just as
  scientific journal articles do)
• Headline
• Lead
• Nut Graf
• First quote (3-6 paragraphs down)brings in the
  human element
• More details and more quotes (inverted pyramid
  style)
• Kicker

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• Headline

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• Lead

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• The lead (also spelled lede)
• The first graf
• Grabs the readers attention.
• Imparts the heart of the matter (simple and
  focused).
• Guidelines
• 1-2 sentences.
• Aim for lt35 words.
• Use the main verb to carry the main news, and use
  action verbs.
• Give complementary, but different information
  than the headline.
• Provide some, but not necessarily all, of the 5
  Ws and 1 H.

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• Beware of these no/nos
• Leave out names that mean nothing to the reader
• Never start with a quote unless its the
  President or the Pope speaking (or its as
  evocative as Craig Venter is an asshole.)
• Never fool your reader (i.e., start with
  something that youre later going to retract or
  contradict).

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• Example
• From Hormone replacement therapy takes new body
  blow (SJ Merc News)
• The latest knock against hormone replacement
  therapy barely reverberated because it broke just
  before the war in Iraq blasted everything else
  off the front page.

• 25 words 1 sentence
• What? Another knock for HRT
• When? Cleverjust before the Iraq war started
• Love the active verbs!

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• Example
• From Hard Times Find Replica of White House for
  Sale (Atlanta Journal)
• The replica of George W. Bushs desk still sits
  in the Oval Office beneath the Iranian and
  American flags. The seal of the president of the
  United States still adorns the floor mats across
  the hall from the zebra-skin rug. And the porch
  overlooking the 75-car parking lot is still
  called the Truman Balcony.

• 3 sentences (somewhat long for a lede).
• Intriguing/surprising
• Draws you in

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• Nut Graf

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• The nut graf.
• Shortly after the lead paragraph, the so-called
  nut graf flushes out the story the 5 Ws and
  the H.
• Occasionally, the nut graf is hiddencontained
  within the lead or strewn throughout several
  paragraphs. But usually, its identifiable.

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• Nut graf example
• From Hormone replacement therapy takes new body
  blow
• Graf 3 The latest results to be gleaned from the
  Womens Health Initiative study, which will be
  published in the May 8 issue of the New England
  Journal of Medicine, focused on postmenopausal
  women who took hormones even though they didnt
  have severe symptoms. Overall, they reported no
  difference in quality of life from those who took
  placebos. They didnt feel sexier, their
  memories were no better and they didnt
  experience more mental clarity.

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• From Hard Times Find Replica of White House for
  Sale
• Graf 3 For the last seven years, almost as long
  as President Bush has been in Washington, Mr.
  Milani, an Iranian-American home developer, has
  lived in a scaled-down version of the
  presidential mansion in Atlanta. A private Xanadu
  for Mr. Milani, a headache for neighbors and a
  destination for camera-wielding gawkers, the
  16,500-square-foot home has become a kooky symbol
  of this boom-boom citys ever-growing residential
  skyline.
• But now, like the current occupant of the real
  White House, Mr. Milani is planning to leave his
  home.

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• Quotes (unfortunately, not a part of most
  scientific writing)
• The fun part of news writing! The interview
  doesnt involve any writing on your partjust
  eliciting good quotes and strategic placement.
• Quotes?
• Give a human dimension to the story
• Provide evidence
• Provide opinion
• Provide color and flavor
• Flush out the main idea
• Move the story along
• Make the story more readable

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• Example, first quote
• HRT takes new body blow
• 5th graf Women think as they get menopause,
  theyll get old, ugly, useless, and crazy, Grady
  told me on the phone. They think if they take
  hormones, itll all be OK. Then they attribute
  all the good feelings they have to hormone
  therapy.

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Examples, first quote

• Hard Times Find Replica of White House for
  Sale
• 5th graf I still do not want to sell, he said.
  But I will.

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• Attribution
• Blah, blah, blah, blah, Professor Smith said.
• NOT Blah, blah, blah, blah, said Professor
  Smith.
• SV!
• Unless Blah, blah, blah, blah, said Professor
  Smith, the really boring professor that we all
  had to take English from (long attributionsounds
  awkward to say Prof. Smith, the really boring
  professor that we all had to take English from,
  said!).

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• Attribution
• Prefer said to most other possibilities, such
  as noted and remarked, which have particular
  connotations
• Noted implies that whatever the persons
  statement was fact.

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• The kicker!
• The ending.
• Leaves the reader feeling satisfied.
• Often circles back to the lead.
• A quote is often very effective.

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• Kicker
• HRT takes new body blow
• That doesnt mean that every woman who feels
  more vital after taking hormones should conclude
  its all in her head. But if youre only as
  young as you feel, theres a good chance that has
  nothing to do with the pill.

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Kicker

• Hard Times Find Replica of White House for
  Sale
• When asked where he will live next, Mr. Milani
  said he did not know. But he proposed,
  half-seriously, I may build the Congress
  building across the street.

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• Easy to remember guide for structuring a news
  story (the 5 Ss)
• So come on in.
• So what?
• So, so
• So, therefore.
• So long.

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• And finally
• This weeks top 5 countdown

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• 1. Fewer vs. less
• Fewer goes with a countable number
• Less goes with a mass quantity
• Im trying to eat fewer calories.
• Im trying to eat fewer grams of fat.
• BUT
• Im trying to eat less fat.
• ?Use less if theres no S

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• She and I OR She and me?
• Use XX and I for the subject of the sentence
  (nominative case)
• You and I went to the park.
• But use XX and me for the object of a verb or
  preposition (objective case)
• Just between you and me, I think that this
  professor is boring.
• Trick If youd use him or her instead of
  he or she ? then use me instead of I.

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• 3. Who vs. whom
• Same idea? who is the subject and whom is the
  object
• Again, if youd use him or her, use whom.
• Who is it?
• She called to Beth, who (she believed) was
  nearby.
• To whom did you mean to call?
• The message was meant for whom?

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• 3. Who vs. whom
• Then hell buy a plane ticket to Baghdad, to
  visit his mother and his sisters and his
  eighteen-year-old girlfriend, whom he has never
  seen, except in the picture that his mother sent
  when she selected the girl for him.
• he has never seen her.
• ? he has never seen whom.

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• Its vs. its
• Its is the contraction of it is.
• Its true.
• Its is possessive.
• The car stopped working after its battery died.
• ? If you can substitute it is or tisuse its.
• Tis true.

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• 5. As vs. like
• Use as to introduce clauses (compare action)
• We spent the evening as (we did) in the old
  days.
• We wrote down every step, as good scientists
  should.
• Use like (sparinglymore formal to use similar
  to) to compare nouns and pronouns
• OK Her cat is like a dog.
• More formal Her cat is similar to a dog.
• BUT
• Her cat acts as a dog would.
• Note Her cat acts similar to a dog does not
  work. Therefore, dont use like!

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Scientific Writing, HRP 214A useful note

• As Stanford students, you have online access to
  the archives of New Yorker, NY Times, Boston
  Globe, and many others through Lexis-Nexis
• http//www-sul.stanford.edu/? ejournals

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Scientific Writing, HRP 214Homework

• Assignments for next time
• Read
• Read chapters 5-8 of Sin and Syntax (pp. 88-128)
• News Article assignment

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Scientific Writing, HRP 214Preview to next time

• For next time
• We begin our systematic review of the basics of
  writing.
• Words? sentences? paragraphs
• punctuation and parallelism