Title: STUDY PLUS: Unit 5
1STUDY PLUS Unit 5
Disaster Relief
2Lesson Objectives
- To learn how to redraft our formal letters.
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- To write a a 60 second news bulletin for a
fictional disaster.
3Formal letters
We are now going to redraft the letters that we
constructed last session. But first, we must
create a whole - class redrafting checklist
4Formal language
- No contracted words (cant - can not)
- No abbreviations (fridge - refrigerator
- T.V - television)
- Standard English (wheres that to? - where is
that?) - No colloquial/slang (its out of order! - That
is not fair!)
5P
L
A
DA FOREST
D Direct language A Alliteration/Anecdote F
Facts O Opinions R Repetition/
Rhetorical Question E Emotive language S
Statistics T The Rule of Three
Purpose why? Audience who? language
style? Layout form?
6Using connectives when writing to persuade
EXPLAINING IDEAS namely such as as already stated for example in other words
PUTTING IDEAS IN ORDER firstly further most importantly secondly finally lastly
ADDING TO IDEAS in addition also likewise moreover furthermore similarly
CONCLUSION therefore all this evidence points to in conclusion finally all in all
7Whole class guided writing
- We have been asked to put together a short
message (paragraph of thanks) to put in the next
SDCC newsletter, thanking the students for
supporting our mufti day and encouraging them to
participate in our forthcoming Disaster Day.
860 Second News Report
9You are journalists
- You have one hour before the news is going to
be broadcast and you need to inform the nation
about a natural disaster that has just hit
Britain. - You must work in pairs to prepare a 60 second
script to be read aloud on the 6 Oclock News
10- News update The Green Warriors,
environmental crusaders, have stormed the Houses
of Parliament and attacked many members of
parliament, throwing vegetables and eggs at
them... They are also threatening to blow up any
businesses who do not recycle all their paper
the whole city of London has come to a complete
standstill .... the business community is in
uproar ... the Police are attempting to control
the situation through persuasion... The Green
Warriors claim they will not budge until their
demands for a more environmentally friendly world
are met ... They are demanding to meet with the
world's top scientists to discuss ways forward ..
11- NEWS UPDATE ... No-Roadies,
environmental crusaders ... have formed a protest
outside Oldbury ... They are living in trees and
tunnels to stop the work going aheadThey have
attacked many of the builders of the new road
with their bare hands and feet ... the whole
neighbouring area of Berkshire has come to a
standstill because of the demonstration ...
lorries with vital supplies for the local
hospital are not able to get through ... the
Police are concerned for Public Safety and are
preparing to disperse the protestors ... The
No-Roadies hold banners which proclaim "No more
new Roads in Oldbury" ... They demand that the
proposed new road is banned because of more
pollution and traffic to local house-holders
...... Top scientists have been called in to see
if they can solve the problem ...
12You will need to consider
- 1) the formality of language choices,
- 2) selection of content, (5 Ws H)
- 3) length of items,
- 4) attitude to listeners assumed prior
knowledge. - Remember how to create a quick plan! E.g Mind
map your ideas and number them to create a
cohesive structure.
13Plenary
- Lets record our news scripts and consider how
convincing they are.