BRUSH STROKES

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BRUSH STROKES
From Image Grammar by Harry R. Noden Compiled
by Rebecca Meuse Glass
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RESEARCH
Students often see revision, not as an
opportunity to develop and improve a piece of
writing, but as an indication that they have
failed to do it right the first time. -
Donald M. Murray Even high school students
admit to little or no experience in revision. At
best, they may recopy a paper. -Robert L.
Hillerich
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Quick revising is a revision method for when the
results dont matter too much. It may be used
for a clean draft for yourself, a possible draft
for discussion, or a letter to a friend. -
Peter Elbow Thorough Revising involves time,
allowing the writer to visit and revisit the
work, to be allowed to view the writing with
fresh perspectives. - Peter
Elbow
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The writer is an artist, painting images of life
with specific and identifiable brush
strokes. -Harry Noden He began to see
grammar as the process of creating art, it seemed
unnatural to him not to view grammar as a
continuous spectrum in a whole work. -Harry
Noden
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Pictures are not made of flowers, guitars,
people, surf or turf, but with irreducible
elements of art shapes, tones, directions,
sizes, lines, textures, and color. - Frank
Webb Writing is not constructed merely from
experiences, information, characters, plots, but
from fundamental artistic elements of
grammar. - Harry Noden
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ACTION VERBS
Go from passive voice to active voice by deleting
the BE verbs.
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EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The runaway horse was ridden
into town by an old, white-whiskered
rancher. NEW SENTENCE An old, white whiskered
rancher rode the runaway horse into town.
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ANOTHER EXAMPLE
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The gravel road was on the
left side of the barn.
NEW SENTENCE The gravel road curled around the
left side of the barn.
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GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINT WITH ACTION VERBS THE
SENTENCE A snake is a slithering creature.
EXAMPLE The creepy long snake slithered
through the tall grass. --------------------------
------------------------------- STUDENTS
INITIAL SENTENCE A motorbike is driving
down the street. STUDENTS EXAMPLE
______________________________
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BEGINNING PREPOSITIONAL PHRASES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The girl waved good-bye to
her mothers plane. NEW SENTENCE With tears in
her eyes, the girl waved good-bye to her mothers
plane.
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GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINT WITH BEGINNING PREPOSITIONAL
PHRASES EXAMPLE Through the tall yellow
grass, the creepy snake slithered.
______________________________ STUDENTS INITIAL
SENTENCE A motorbike roared down the
street. STUDENTS EXAMPLE _______________________
______________________________________________
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PAINTING WITH PARTICIPLES
Imagine in your minds eye, a football player
running down a field. Try adding an ing verb at
the beginning of the sentence.
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EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The football player darted
down the field. NEW SENTENCE Dodging the
tackle and weaving through their defense, the
football player darted down the field.
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GUIDED PRACTICE PAINTING WITH
PARTICIPLES EXAMPLE Crisscrossing and sliding,
the creepy snake slithered through the tall
grass. ___________________________________________
______________________ STUDENTS INITIAL
SENTENCE Down the street, the motorbike
roared. STUDENTS EXAMPLE _______________________
_________ __________________________________
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PAINTING WITH SHIFTED ADJECTIVES
Adjectives out of order often amplify the details
of an image. Professional writers often shift
their adjectives rather than add them before a
noun.
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EXAMPLES OF SHIFTED ADJECTIVES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The usually active
and energetic young boy struggled to reach the
third floor landing. Usually
active and energetic, the young boy struggled to
reach the third floor landing.
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MORE EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The trembling and frightened
young pup scooted under the bed during the
thunderstorm.
NEW SENTENCE Trembling and frightened, the
young pup scooted under the bed during the
thunderstorm.
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GUIDED PRACTICE PAINTING WITH SHIFTED
ADJECTIVES EXAMPLE Creepy and slimy, the
greenish black snake slithered through the tall
grass. ___________________________________________
__________________ STUDENTS INITIAL
SENTENCE The motorbike roared down the street.
EXAMPLE ________________________________________
________________
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PAINTING WITH APPOSITIVES
An appositive is a noun that adds additional
information to a preceding noun. It provides a
second image, expanding the details of the image.

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EXAMPLES OF APPOSITIVES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The raft drifted slowly down
the winding river.
NEW SENTENCE The raft, a skimpy wooden
structure, drifted slowly down the winding
river.
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MORE EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The waterfall poured the
fresh pure spray into the creek.
NEW SENTENCE The
waterfall, a tilted pitcher, poured the fresh,
pure spray into the creek.
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GUIDED PRACTICE PAINTING WITH APPOSITIVES EXAMPLE
A poisonous snake, the creepy rattler,
slithered through the tall grass. ________________
__________________________________________________
________ STUDENTS INITIAL SENTENCE The
motorbike roared down the street.
EXAMPLE down the
street._______________________________ ___________
_____________________
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PAINTING WITH THE ABSOLUTE
An absolute is a noun combined with an ing verb
at the beginning of the sentence.
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EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE The dog yawned
silently.
NEW SENTENCE Paws curling, back
stretching, the dog yawned silently.
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GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINTING WITH ABSOLUTES EXAMPLE Head rising,
body slithering, the snake threatened the
rat. _____________________________________________
______________ STUDENTS INITIAL SENTENCE Large
and ugly, the swerving motorbike, a death
machine, roared down the street.
EXAMPLE ______________________________ _________
_____________________
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Brush Strokes Review Action Verbs Go from
passive voice to active voice be replacing the
Be verbs.  Beginning Prepositional Phrases
The girl waved can change to, With tears in her
eyes, the girl  Painting with Participles Add
an ing verb at the beginning of the sentence The
football player darted can change to, Dodging the
tackle and weaving through their defense, the
football player.          
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 Shifted Adjectives The usually active and
energetic young boy can be changed to Usually
active and energetic, the young boy.   Painting
with Appositives a noun that adds additional
information The raft drifted can be changed to
The raft, a skimpy wooden structure, . .
.   Painting with the Absolute a noun combines
with an -ing verb at the beginning of a
sentence The dog yawned can be changed to Paws
curling, back stretching, the dog.    
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REFERENCES Elbow,
Peter (1981). Writing With Power. N.Y.
Oxford University Press. Hillerich, Robert L.
Teaching Children to Write, K-8.
Englewood Cliffs, N.J. Prentice Hall,
Inc. Murray, Donald M. (1995). The Craft of
Revision. 2nd ed. NY Harcourt Brace College
Publishers. Noden, Harry. The Writer As Artist
Basic Brush Strokes. Image Grammar. Heineman
Publishing, New Hampshire, 1999.
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LESSON PLAN
 OBJECTIVES Incorporate a revision strategy
that will be used to change sentence structure.
  READING/WRITING CONNECTION
Rembrandts Beret by Johnny Alcorn Paintings by
Stephen Alcorn   EXPLANATION An introduction of
Harry R. Noden and his approach to
integrating the teaching of grammar and writing.
   
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ACTIVITY 1 Power Point demonstration, which
explains what brush strokes are and how they
may be used.  GUIDED PRACTICE An
example of each of the six brush strokes,
followed by students following example by
using each of the brush strokes. Work as a whole
group, creating new sentences on overhead
transparencies.  
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ACTIVITY 2 Small groups combine brush
strokes, creating their own base sentences.
 Share on overhead transparencies.
   INDEPENDENT PRACTICE Incorporate brush
strokes into writing.   SHARE AND
DISCUSSION What are the advantages of
utilizing this strategy? Did it help improve
your sentence structure? Explain how.