Unit Seven : Avoid Unnecessary Shifts in a Sentence

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Unit Seven Avoid Unnecessary Shifts in a
Sentence
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• The graduate student recorded the data and then
  writes a summary report.
• Revised The graduate student recorded the data
  and then wrote a summary report.

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• Turn on the machine if conditions are such that a
  hazard might occur and the valve should be
  closed.
• Revised Turn on the machine and close the
  valve if conditions are such that a hazard might
  occur.

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• It is interesting that the laboratory manager
  arranged the meeting and the discussion was led
  by him.
• Revised It is interesting that the laboratory
  manager arranged the meeting and led the
  discussion.

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• Execute the necessary commands provided that they
  are valid and the program should be reviewed.
• Revised Execute the necessary commands
  provided that they are valid and review the
  program.

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• The manager instructed the employees to arrange
  the final details and also is the final program
  ready to print.
• Revised The manager instructed the employees
  to arrange the final and also asked if the final
  program was ready to print.

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• When the engineer attempts to confirm prediction
  accuracy, you should not neglect possible errors.
  
• Revised When the engineer attempts to confirm
  prediction accuracy, he or she should not neglect
  possible errors.

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• An application makes calls to the executive
  kernel services, which will then make calls to
  the hardware.
• Revised An application makes calls to the
  executive kernel services, which then makes calls
  to the hardware.

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• Mice and trackballs are used for the same reason
  and it performs the same task.
• Revised Mice and trackballs are used for the
  same reason and perform the same task.

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• Give consideration to the external factors and
  the surrounding environment must be assessed.
• Revised Give consideration to the external
  factors and assess the surrounding environment.

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• The network programmer establishes a link between
  two or more people so you can exchange
  information.
• Revised The network programmer establishes a
  link between two or more people to exchange
  information.