Thesis Statements and Video Games?

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Thesis Statementsand Video Games?
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First, lets talk video games
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How is a thesis statement like a video game
system?

• A thesis statement is like a controller for the
  Xbox 360 or PlayStation 3.
• When you are playing a video game, what would
  happen if the controller was disconnected from
  the game console?.

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Game over

• Your character would probably die and you would
  lose the game!
• Well, its the same thing with your thesis
  statement

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What do you mean?

• If you dont put a thesis statement in your
  essay, your essay will die, and you will lose
  your audience. The key to winning in the game of
  writing is having a well-built thesis statement.
  

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What is a thesis statement?

• A thesis statement is the main idea of an essay.
• It is often a point you want to argue or support
  in an essay.
• SO
• The thesis statement explains to a reader the
  main idea of the essay, and the writers opinion
  on that idea.

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• A thesis statement is usually one sentence.
• It is often placed in the introductory paragraph
  of an essay.
• A thesis statement is a claim that could be
  argued.
• The essay will contain evidence and opinions that
  support the argument.

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Thesis statements avoid the following

• the first person (I believe, In my opinion, etc.)
• unclear language (It seems, etc.)
• attempting two topics at once (even if they seem
  related). Pick one and stick with it.
• just stating a fact - A thesis is something you
  plan to make an argument about.

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A thesis statement should

• contain a topic (main idea of what you are
  writing about)
• contain an opinion about the topic (what your
  attitude is toward the topic)

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A thesis statement should not be too broad.

• Too Broad
• The world is a magnificent place to live.
• Better
• Good teachers make Saraland Middle a fantastic
  school.

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Which sentence is too broad to be a good thesis
statement?

1. One reason to live in Saraland is access to many
   wonderful places to fish.
2. Saraland is a great place to live.

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Too Broad

• Saraland is a great place to live.

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A thesis statement should not be too wordy.

• Wordy
• Some problems with Saraland Middle is that it
  needs a larger outdoor PE area, an auditorium,
  more restrooms and physical changes to the
  building.
• Better
• Saraland Middle School needs several changes to
  its facility to make it a better school.

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Which sentence is too wordy to be a good thesis
statement?

• A. Abe Lincoln was one of the best presidents the
  United States has ever known.
• B. Abe Lincoln was an excellent speaker, the 16th
  President of the United States, a liberator of
  slaves, and united the North and South at the end
  of the American Civil War.

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Too Wordy

• Abe Lincoln was an excellent speaker, the 16th
  President of the United States, a liberator of
  slaves, and united the North and South at the end
  of the American Civil War.

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A thesis statement should not be too general.

• Too general
• Saraland Middle is a good school.
• Better
• Weekly writing practice has led to improved
  writing skills for the students at Saraland
  Middle School.

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Which sentence is too general to be a good thesis
statement?

• A. Music makes people happy.
• B. Music therapy is useful in relieving stress
  and other conditions.

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Too general

• Music makes people happy.

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A thesis statement should not be a title.

• A title
• Cost of Living
• Better
• The cost of living in Saraland is lower than in
  most other cities in the United States.

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Which sentence would not be a good thesis
statement because it is a title?

• A. Good teaching has led to an increase in ARMT
  scores at Saraland Middle School.
• B. Rising ARMT scores at Saraland Middle

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A Title

• Rising ARMT Scores at Saraland Middle

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A thesis statement should not be a a fact.

• A fact
• The average temperature for Saraland in winter is
  54 and in summer is 91 degrees.
• Better
• The climate in Saraland is ideal for outdoor
  sports.

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Which sentence would not be a good thesis
statement because it is a fact?

• A. The recycling of one aluminum can saves enough
  energy to run a TV for three hours.
• B. Recycling is one of the most important jobs a
  person can do to protect our environment.

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A Fact

• The recycling of one aluminum can saves enough
  energy to run a TV for three hours.

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More Practice
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Directions 1) Find the opinion words in the
statement. If there are no opinion words, it is
not a thesis statement. 2) Tell if the statement
is a good thesis statement.

• Although most people believe otherwise, bats are
  harmless and highly beneficial.

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Directions 1) Find the opinion words in the
statement. If there are no opinion words, it is
not a thesis statement. 2) Tell if the statement
is a good thesis statement.

• In this essay I will discuss the crime rate in
  New York City.

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Directions 1) Find the opinion words in the
statement. If there are no opinion words, it is
not a thesis statement. 2) Tell if the statement
is a good thesis statement.

• Energetic exercise is a good way to help relieve
  stress.

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Directions 1) Find the opinion words in the
statement. If there are no opinion words, it is
not a thesis statement. 2) Tell if the statement
is a good thesis statement.

• Saraland and Creola differ in many ways.

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Directions 1) Find the opinion words in the
statement. If there are no opinion words, it is
not a thesis statement. 2) Tell if the statement
is a good thesis statement.

• This paper will consider the advantages and
  disadvantages of students having nightly homework.

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Directions 1) Find the opinion words in the
statement. If there are no opinion words, it is
not a thesis statement. 2) Tell if the statement
is a good thesis statement.

• Hate speech should be eliminated for many reasons.

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Take out a piece of notebook paper and number
from 1 to 10.In each of the following slides
tell whether the sentence is a good or bad thesis
statement.
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Good or Bad

• Many people do not like to watch violent horror
  movies.
• Todays movies do not have the emotional impact
  of the classic horror movies of the 1940s.

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Good or Bad

• Rap music is the best music ever.
• Although many people find rap music offensive, it
  has had a positive impact on todays youth.

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Good or Bad

1. I enjoy white water rafting.
2. The first white water rafting trip can challenge
   a person both in body and spirit.

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Good or Bad

1. Sixth grade students are busy.
2. The life of a typical sixth grade student is
   challenging due to the need to succeed in
   extracurricular activities.

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Good or Bad

1. Community service projects include building
   shelter for the homeless, servicing meals to the
   hungry, providing transportation for the sick,
   distributing clothes, and a large number of other
   helpful activities.
2. Students should help others who are less
   fortunate.

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Back to Video Games

• Write a practice thesis statement on your
  favorite video game or television show.