Title: The 6 1 Traits of Writing
1The 61 Traits of Writing
- Mr. Budden
- Indiana Teachers of Writing
- IUPUI
2We must change from a model that picks winners
to one that will create winners. ?Harold
Hodgkinson Michigan The State and Its
Educational System
3The 61 Traits of Writing
Ideas the meaning and development of the
message Organization the internal structure of
the piece Voice the tone of the piecethe
personal stamp that the writer brings to it Word
Choice the specific vocabulary the writer uses
to convey meaning Sentence Fluency the way
the words and phrases flow throughout the
text Conventions the mechanical correctness of
the piece Presentation the overall appearance
of the work
4VOICE
- Recognizing strong voice
- Employing the power of YOUR voicehow?
5(60)
6(No Transcript)
7(No Transcript)
8(No Transcript)
9(No Transcript)
10- A writer should like the subject of the writing
- A writer should speak right to the reader
- A reader should feel what the writer feels
- A reader can indentify real person behind the
writing - The tone (humorous, dramatic, et.) of the writing
should match the subject - Good writing seems unique to the writer
11- Yes, I had beautiful long hair after my older
sister had pinned the fall to the top of my head
in her bedroom, which was painted the color of
the best sky. She was proud that I finally took
an interest in my hair, and there was only one
thing I could think to do to keep from bursting.
I decided to go play rodeo on my bicycle with the
purple banana seat and the sissy bars. It was my
stallion, and we had been down a dusty road or
two.
12- As I climbed on and started speeding down the
street, I could feel my sisters newfound respect
fading like an old star, but I couldnt stop. I
turned the corner of Charles and Jefferson as if
nothing could touch meI rode faster an dfaster.
As I went past the Kizers house, where all the
mangy foster children lived, one of them shouted,
Nice wig! and I yelled back, my face bent close
to the handle bars, Its my real hair! and it
was a long time before I went back home.
13- and so there aint nothing more to write about,
and I am rotten glad of it, because if Id
aknowed what a trouble it was to make book, I
wouldnt atackled it, and aint going to no
more.
14- Exclamation points are the most irritating of
all. Look! they say, look at what I just said!
How amazing is my thought! It is like being
forced to watch someone elses small child
jumping up and down crazily in the center of the
living room shouting to attract attention.
15Wolf
- The Gray Wolf (Canis lupus also spelled Grey
Wolf, see spelling differences also known as
Timber Wolf or Wolf) is a mammal in the order
Carnivora. The Gray Wolf shares a common ancestry
with the domestic dog (Canis lupus familiaris),
as evidenced by DNA sequencing and genetic drift
studies. Gray wolves were once abundant and
distributed over much of North America, Eurasia,
and the Middle East. Today, for a variety of
human-related reasons, including widespread
habitat destruction and excessive hunting, wolves
inhabit only a very limited portion of their
former range. (fr. Wikipedia)
16 17 Wolves (in Zoobooks 2)
18- Wolves are the lions of the Northern Hemisphere.
Found in North America, Europe and Asia, the
lives of wolves are very similar to the lives of
lions in Africa. Like lions, wolves live in
groups, they are meat-eating animals that work
together to catch prey, and they are beautiful
animals. In fact, some of them even have thick
ruffs of hair that look like the manes of lions.
When you consider all these similarities, it
seems strange that many people admire lions, but
dislike wolves. Lions are called magnificent
and lordly. But wolves are often called
sneaky and cowardly.
19 The Redwoods
- Last year, we went on a vacation and we had a
wonderful time. The weather was sunny and warm
and there was lots to do, so we were never bored. - My parents visited friends and took pictures
for their friends back home. My brother and I
swam and also hiked in the woods. When we got
tired of that, we just ate and had a wonderful
time. - It was exciting and fun to be together as a
family and to do things together. I love my
family and this is a time that I will remember
for a long time. I hope we will go back again
next year for more fun and an even better time
than we had this year.
20- MOUSE ALERT
- As soon as school was out we left on vacation.
Nothing went the was it was supposed to. Dad
backed into a tree on the way out of the
driveway, pushing the bike rack through the rear
window and nearly scaring my sister to death.
She was cranky the rest of the trip. We had to
take our other car, which is smaller and you
can't hook the bike rack up to it. Now my sister
and me were crowded together so much she kept
complaining about me breathing on her and taking
up all her air and foot room. Plus now Dad knew a
big bill would be waiting for him when we got
home. It put everyone in a lovely trip starting
mood.
21- We were supposed to go to Yellowstone Park.
Well, actually, we did, but just barely. I think
we hold the world's record for shortest time
spent in the park. This was all due to my
mother's new attitude toward animals. The night
before yellowstone we stayed in a cabin on the
edge of the park. It had a lot of mice but most
of them had the good sense to stay hidden in the
walls. One poor furry guy had a death wish and
showed himself. The whole family went into
action. My father got a broom, which looked like
an oversized weapen for a mouse. My mother hugged
her pink flanel night gown around her knees,
jumped up on a wood chair and started shreiking
"Kill him! Kill him!"
22- Her eyes were as big as her fists. I had never
seen her quite so blood thirsty. My sister spent
the whole time dancing on the bed crying her eyes
out and yelling "Don't kill it Dad! Don't kill
it!" It was up to Dad and me to trap it. We got
it in a pickle jar and took it down to the lake
and let it go. It seemed really happy to get away
from us. I thought I knew how it felt.
23- The next day we raced through Yellowstone and
then headed home. My Mother said she had enough
of animals. For weeks afterwards, this was the
big story she told everyone who asked about our
vacation. You'd have thought the whole point of
our trip was to go on a mouse hunt. Dad said all
the money we saved by not staying at Yellowstone
could go to pay for the broken car window, so for
him the trip worked out perfect. As for me, I'm
still planing to get back to Yellowstone one day.
I want to see something bigger than a mouse.
24The Scoring Guide
- Individual bullets support accurate and reliable
assessment - The bullets are the basis of the written and or
verbal comments by the teacher or peers. - Each bullet can be a focus lesson for instruction
in writing workshop.
25Key Qualities of the Voice Trait
- The writer takes risks and experiments with style
to match the purpose and audience - The writer and the reader have a powerful
connection and reveals the person behind the
words - The writing creates a reaction in the reader by
speaking directly to the reader on an emotional
level - The writer is excited about the topic.
26PEER RESPONSE. Activity Rules
- No JUDGMENTS ALLOWED. Focus on CONTENT only, not
the writing. - ASK Interpretive Questions ONLY, which
- cannot be answered with a Yes or No
- begin with WHO, WHAT, WHERE, WHEN, WHY, and HOW
- dont begin with IS, ARE, WAS, WERE, CAN, WILL
27The 61 Traits of Writing Are NOT
- About worksheets or out-of-context practice
They are about thinking
28The 61 Traits of Writing ARE
- A common language to talk about writing This is
a new thing for many teachers - A shared vision of what good looks like in all
forms of writing Setting clear targets for
success - An assessment tool for teachers and students
The strength of the model - A model for use in a writing process classroom
Traits are what we do when we revise and edit
2961 Traits and the Writing Process
- Prewrite Discover what you want to say (Ideas,
Organization, Voice) (mode and genre) - Draft Get it down (Sentence Fluency)
- Share/Feedback Find out what worked and what
need work (for one or more traits or the piece as
a whole) - Revise Rework the text to make it clear (Ideas,
Organization, Voice, Word Choice, Sentence
Fluency) - Edit Make the text readable (Conventions
spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammar,
and paragraphing) - Finish Polish the final appearance
(Presentation)
30(No Transcript)
31What Is Revision?
- Revise to change the text to make it clear
- ideas
- organization
- voice
- word choice
- sentence fluency
32What is editing?
- Editing to edit the text for conventions of
Standard English - spelling
- punctuation
- capitalization
- grammar
- paragraphing
- Presentation The appearance and neatness of the
work -
(10)
33VOICE is learned through any activity that allows
you to
- feel safe and accepted as a writer
- see moments of voice in writing and pictures
- value and request diversity
- see risk as rewardedeven over success
- hear the voices of others
- write to someone
- write voice inor out.
34- What verbs are missing from the following passage
from Annie Dillards essay In the Jungle in her
book Teaching a Stone to Talk Expeditions and
Encounters?
35- The lake was wonderful. Herons, egrets and
ibises _____the sawgrass shores, kingfishers and
cuckoos _____ from sunlight to shade, great
turkeylike birds ____ in dead branches, and hawks
____ overhead. There was all the time in the
world. - I saw the shoreline water ___ and the sawgrass
___above a thrashing paichi, an enormous black
fish in these partsPiranha fish live in the
lakes, and electric eels. I ____ my fingers in
the water, figuring it would be worth it
36- The lake was wonderful. Herons, egrets and
ibises plodded the sawgrass shores, kingfishers
and cuckoos clattered from sunlight to shade,
great turkeylike birds fussed in dead branches,
and hawks lolled overhead. There was all the
time in the world. I saw the shoreline water roil
and the sawgrass heave above a thrashing paichi,
an enormous black fish in these partsPiranha
fish live in the lakes, and electric eels. I
dangled my fingers in the water, figuring it
would be worth it
37Valiant Tries in Voice Metaphors and Similes
- Her face was a perfect oval, like a circle that
had its two sides gently compressed by a Thigh
Master. - She had a deep, throaty, genuine laugh, like that
sound a dog makes just before it throws up. - From the attic came an unearthly howl. The whole
scene had an eerie, surreal quality, like when
you're on vacation in another city and Jeopardy
comes on at 700 p.m. instead of 730. - Her hair glistened in the rain like a nose hair
after a sneeze. - John and Mary had never met. They were like two
hummingbirds who had also never met.
38- He fell for her like his heart was a mob
informant and she was the East River. - The young fighter had a hungry look, the kind you
get from not eating for a while. - The ballerina rose gracefully en Pointe and
extended one slender leg behind her, like a dog
at a fire hydrant. - He was deeply in love. When she spoke, he thought
he heard bells, as if she were a garbage truck
backing up. - The plan was simple, like my brother-in-law Phil.
But unlike Phil, this plan just might work.