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The 61 Traits of Writing
  • Mr. Budden
  • Indiana Teachers of Writing
  • IUPUI

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We must change from a model that picks winners
to one that will create winners. ?Harold
Hodgkinson Michigan The State and Its
Educational System
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The 61 Traits of Writing
Ideas the meaning and development of the
message Organization the internal structure of
the piece Voice the tone of the piecethe
personal stamp that the writer brings to it Word
Choice the specific vocabulary the writer uses
to convey meaning Sentence Fluency the way
the words and phrases flow throughout the
text Conventions the mechanical correctness of
the piece Presentation the overall appearance
of the work
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VOICE
  • Recognizing strong voice
  • Employing the power of YOUR voicehow?

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  • A writer should like the subject of the writing
  • A writer should speak right to the reader
  • A reader should feel what the writer feels
  • A reader can indentify real person behind the
    writing
  • The tone (humorous, dramatic, et.) of the writing
    should match the subject
  • Good writing seems unique to the writer

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  • Yes, I had beautiful long hair after my older
    sister had pinned the fall to the top of my head
    in her bedroom, which was painted the color of
    the best sky. She was proud that I finally took
    an interest in my hair, and there was only one
    thing I could think to do to keep from bursting.
    I decided to go play rodeo on my bicycle with the
    purple banana seat and the sissy bars. It was my
    stallion, and we had been down a dusty road or
    two.

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  • As I climbed on and started speeding down the
    street, I could feel my sisters newfound respect
    fading like an old star, but I couldnt stop. I
    turned the corner of Charles and Jefferson as if
    nothing could touch meI rode faster an dfaster.
    As I went past the Kizers house, where all the
    mangy foster children lived, one of them shouted,
    Nice wig! and I yelled back, my face bent close
    to the handle bars, Its my real hair! and it
    was a long time before I went back home.

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  • and so there aint nothing more to write about,
    and I am rotten glad of it, because if Id
    aknowed what a trouble it was to make book, I
    wouldnt atackled it, and aint going to no
    more.

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  • Exclamation points are the most irritating of
    all. Look! they say, look at what I just said!
    How amazing is my thought! It is like being
    forced to watch someone elses small child
    jumping up and down crazily in the center of the
    living room shouting to attract attention.

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Wolf
  • The Gray Wolf (Canis lupus also spelled Grey
    Wolf, see spelling differences also known as
    Timber Wolf or Wolf) is a mammal in the order
    Carnivora. The Gray Wolf shares a common ancestry
    with the domestic dog (Canis lupus familiaris),
    as evidenced by DNA sequencing and genetic drift
    studies. Gray wolves were once abundant and
    distributed over much of North America, Eurasia,
    and the Middle East. Today, for a variety of
    human-related reasons, including widespread
    habitat destruction and excessive hunting, wolves
    inhabit only a very limited portion of their
    former range. (fr. Wikipedia)

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  • versus

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Wolves (in Zoobooks 2)
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  • Wolves are the lions of the Northern Hemisphere.
    Found in North America, Europe and Asia, the
    lives of wolves are very similar to the lives of
    lions in Africa. Like lions, wolves live in
    groups, they are meat-eating animals that work
    together to catch prey, and they are beautiful
    animals. In fact, some of them even have thick
    ruffs of hair that look like the manes of lions.
    When you consider all these similarities, it
    seems strange that many people admire lions, but
    dislike wolves. Lions are called magnificent
    and lordly. But wolves are often called
    sneaky and cowardly.

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The Redwoods
  • Last year, we went on a vacation and we had a
    wonderful time. The weather was sunny and warm
    and there was lots to do, so we were never bored.
  • My parents visited friends and took pictures
    for their friends back home. My brother and I
    swam and also hiked in the woods. When we got
    tired of that, we just ate and had a wonderful
    time.
  • It was exciting and fun to be together as a
    family and to do things together. I love my
    family and this is a time that I will remember
    for a long time. I hope we will go back again
    next year for more fun and an even better time
    than we had this year.

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  • MOUSE ALERT
  • As soon as school was out we left on vacation.
    Nothing went the was it was supposed to. Dad
    backed into a tree on the way out of the
    driveway, pushing the bike rack through the rear
    window and nearly scaring my sister to death.
    She was cranky the rest of the trip. We had to
    take our other car, which is smaller and you
    can't hook the bike rack up to it. Now my sister
    and me were crowded together so much she kept
    complaining about me breathing on her and taking
    up all her air and foot room. Plus now Dad knew a
    big bill would be waiting for him when we got
    home. It put everyone in a lovely trip starting
    mood.

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  • We were supposed to go to Yellowstone Park.
    Well, actually, we did, but just barely. I think
    we hold the world's record for shortest time
    spent in the park. This was all due to my
    mother's new attitude toward animals. The night
    before yellowstone we stayed in a cabin on the
    edge of the park. It had a lot of mice but most
    of them had the good sense to stay hidden in the
    walls. One poor furry guy had a death wish and
    showed himself. The whole family went into
    action. My father got a broom, which looked like
    an oversized weapen for a mouse. My mother hugged
    her pink flanel night gown around her knees,
    jumped up on a wood chair and started shreiking
    "Kill him! Kill him!"

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  • Her eyes were as big as her fists. I had never
    seen her quite so blood thirsty. My sister spent
    the whole time dancing on the bed crying her eyes
    out and yelling "Don't kill it Dad! Don't kill
    it!" It was up to Dad and me to trap it. We got
    it in a pickle jar and took it down to the lake
    and let it go. It seemed really happy to get away
    from us. I thought I knew how it felt.

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  • The next day we raced through Yellowstone and
    then headed home. My Mother said she had enough
    of animals. For weeks afterwards, this was the
    big story she told everyone who asked about our
    vacation. You'd have thought the whole point of
    our trip was to go on a mouse hunt. Dad said all
    the money we saved by not staying at Yellowstone
    could go to pay for the broken car window, so for
    him the trip worked out perfect. As for me, I'm
    still planing to get back to Yellowstone one day.
    I want to see something bigger than a mouse.

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The Scoring Guide
  • Individual bullets support accurate and reliable
    assessment
  • The bullets are the basis of the written and or
    verbal comments by the teacher or peers.
  • Each bullet can be a focus lesson for instruction
    in writing workshop.

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Key Qualities of the Voice Trait
  • The writer takes risks and experiments with style
    to match the purpose and audience
  • The writer and the reader have a powerful
    connection and reveals the person behind the
    words
  • The writing creates a reaction in the reader by
    speaking directly to the reader on an emotional
    level
  • The writer is excited about the topic.

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PEER RESPONSE. Activity Rules
  • No JUDGMENTS ALLOWED. Focus on CONTENT only, not
    the writing.
  • ASK Interpretive Questions ONLY, which
  • cannot be answered with a Yes or No
  • begin with WHO, WHAT, WHERE, WHEN, WHY, and HOW
  • dont begin with IS, ARE, WAS, WERE, CAN, WILL

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The 61 Traits of Writing Are NOT
  • About worksheets or out-of-context practice
    They are about thinking

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The 61 Traits of Writing ARE
  • A common language to talk about writing This is
    a new thing for many teachers
  • A shared vision of what good looks like in all
    forms of writing Setting clear targets for
    success
  • An assessment tool for teachers and students
    The strength of the model
  • A model for use in a writing process classroom
    Traits are what we do when we revise and edit

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61 Traits and the Writing Process
  • Prewrite Discover what you want to say (Ideas,
    Organization, Voice) (mode and genre)
  • Draft Get it down (Sentence Fluency)
  • Share/Feedback Find out what worked and what
    need work (for one or more traits or the piece as
    a whole)
  • Revise Rework the text to make it clear (Ideas,
    Organization, Voice, Word Choice, Sentence
    Fluency)
  • Edit Make the text readable (Conventions
    spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammar,
    and paragraphing)
  • Finish Polish the final appearance
    (Presentation)

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What Is Revision?
  • Revise to change the text to make it clear
  • ideas
  • organization
  • voice
  • word choice
  • sentence fluency

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What is editing?
  • Editing to edit the text for conventions of
    Standard English
  • spelling
  • punctuation
  • capitalization
  • grammar
  • paragraphing
  • Presentation The appearance and neatness of the
    work

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VOICE is learned through any activity that allows
you to
  • feel safe and accepted as a writer
  • see moments of voice in writing and pictures
  • value and request diversity
  • see risk as rewardedeven over success
  • hear the voices of others
  • write to someone
  • write voice inor out.

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  • What verbs are missing from the following passage
    from Annie Dillards essay In the Jungle in her
    book Teaching a Stone to Talk Expeditions and
    Encounters?

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  • The lake was wonderful. Herons, egrets and
    ibises _____the sawgrass shores, kingfishers and
    cuckoos _____ from sunlight to shade, great
    turkeylike birds ____ in dead branches, and hawks
    ____ overhead. There was all the time in the
    world.
  • I saw the shoreline water ___ and the sawgrass
    ___above a thrashing paichi, an enormous black
    fish in these partsPiranha fish live in the
    lakes, and electric eels. I ____ my fingers in
    the water, figuring it would be worth it

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  • The lake was wonderful. Herons, egrets and
    ibises plodded the sawgrass shores, kingfishers
    and cuckoos clattered from sunlight to shade,
    great turkeylike birds fussed in dead branches,
    and hawks lolled overhead. There was all the
    time in the world. I saw the shoreline water roil
    and the sawgrass heave above a thrashing paichi,
    an enormous black fish in these partsPiranha
    fish live in the lakes, and electric eels. I
    dangled my fingers in the water, figuring it
    would be worth it

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Valiant Tries in Voice Metaphors and Similes
  • Her face was a perfect oval, like a circle that
    had its two sides gently compressed by a Thigh
    Master.
  • She had a deep, throaty, genuine laugh, like that
    sound a dog makes just before it throws up.
  • From the attic came an unearthly howl. The whole
    scene had an eerie, surreal quality, like when
    you're on vacation in another city and Jeopardy
    comes on at 700 p.m. instead of 730.
  • Her hair glistened in the rain like a nose hair
    after a sneeze.
  • John and Mary had never met. They were like two
    hummingbirds who had also never met.

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  • He fell for her like his heart was a mob
    informant and she was the East River.
  • The young fighter had a hungry look, the kind you
    get from not eating for a while.
  • The ballerina rose gracefully en Pointe and
    extended one slender leg behind her, like a dog
    at a fire hydrant.
  • He was deeply in love. When she spoke, he thought
    he heard bells, as if she were a garbage truck
    backing up.
  • The plan was simple, like my brother-in-law Phil.
    But unlike Phil, this plan just might work.
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