Grammar

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Grammar

• Pronoun/antecedent clarity
• Parallel structure

2
Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Pronouns and antecedents clarity
• Original Lennie began traveling with George
  after his aunt died.
• What is wrong with this sentence?

3
Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Right This is known as unclear
  pronoun/antecedent reference. We dont know who
  he refers to Is it Georges aunt or Lennies
  aunt?
• The fix Lennie began traveling with George after
  Lennies aunt died.

4
Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Original Candy tells George he should have been
  the one to shoot his dog.
• Oooh, we have lots of problems here. First, who
  does he refer to? Is Candy saying Candy should
  have been the one to shoot the dog, or should
  George have been the one?
• Second, who does his refer to? Is it Candys
  dog or Georges dog?

5
Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• A solution
• Candy says, I ought to have shot that dog
  myself, George. I shouldnt ought to of let no
  stranger shoot my dog (61).
• This not only clears up what Candy is saying,
  but it also helps you use actual words from the
  text to support your point, which is always a
  good thing.

6
Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Identify the problem and fix it.
• Original This shows that George has to be the
  one to kill Lennie and not anyone else.

7
Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Nice work. You realized that the sentence sounds
  like George has to kill Lennie and not kill
  anyone else.
• The fix This shows that George has to be the one
  to kill Lennie. He cannot allow anyone else to do
  it.

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Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Crooks walks to the doorway of the bunkhouse and
  tells Slim the tar for his mules foot is ready.
• Crooks walks to the doorway of the bunkhouse and
  tells Slim the tar for the mules foot is ready.
• The second after George shoots Lennie in the
  brush, he is immediately alone and lonely.
• The second after he shoots Lennie in the brush,
  George is immediately alone and lonely.

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Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• Also, the common loneliness of all protrudes
  when people find out that Lennie and George
  travel together and react with surprise and
  secret jealousy.
• Also, common loneliness is evident when people
  react with jealousy and surprise upon discovering
  George and Lennie travel together.
• When Lennie walks into the room one night when
  all the other men are away, Crooks tells him how
  truly lonely and sad his life is.
• When Lennie walks into the room one night when
  all the other men are away, Crooks reveals how
  truly lonely and sad Crooks s life is.
• George leaves Lennie behind to play with his
  puppy.
• George leaves Lennie behind to play with the
  puppy Slim gave Lennie.

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Pronoun/antecedent clarity

• The one time someone comes to talk to Crooks, he
  is harsh toward him.
• The one time someone comes to talk to him, Crooks
  is harsh toward his visitor.
• All of the other men travel alone, so when George
  and Lennie arrive together, they are very taken
  aback.
• All of the other men travel alone, so they are
  very taken aback when George and Lennie arrive
  together.