Do Now:

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Do Now

• Clear your desk except for your narrative draft.
  
• After you have turned in your quiz, read through
  your draft and identify at least three places
  where you can make your writing more interesting.
  

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?
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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?
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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• The biggest coincidence that day happened when
  David and I ended up sitting next to each other
  at the Super Bowl.
• Sitting next to David at the Super Bowl was a
  tremendous coincidence.
• David and I, without any prior planning, ended up
  sitting right next to each other at the Super
  Bowl.
• Guided by some bizarre coincidence, David and I
  ended up sitting right next to each other at the
  Super Bowl.

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• 1. Use adjectives.
• Ripe, juicy peaches made my Grandmothers pie
  the best.
• 2. Use a gerund.
• Skiing, a favorite winter sport, is being
  overtaken by snowboarding.
• 3. Use an appositive.
• Sheila, the smartest girl in the class, received
  an award.
• 4. Use an infinitive (to run, to sit, to play,
  etc.).
• To win an award was a proud achievement for
  Natasha.
• 5. Use a prepositional phrase.
• In the high tower, the princess waits for her
  prince to arrive. 
• 6. Use parallel structure (a conjunction between
  adjectives).
• Handsome and fearless, the prince climbed the
  tower to his princess. 
• 7. Use a Participle or Participial Phrase (ing
  or ed)
• Slithering down the trunk of the tree, I ripped
  my best pants.
• Impressed by the ceremony, we left the room in
  silence.

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

1. Use adjectives.
2. Use a gerund.
3. Use an appositive.
4. Use an infinitive (to run, to sit, to play,
   etc.).
5. Use a prepositional phrase.
6. Use parallel structure (a conjunction between
   adjectives).
7. Use a Participle or Participial Phrase (ing or
   ed)

• Read through the first three words of each of
  your partners sentences.
• If your partner repeats the same words or word
  types more than twice, write VAR.

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• The students were confused. They hated grammar.
  
• The students were confused they hated grammar.
• The students were confused because they hated
  grammar.

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• Grammar is a subject that strikes fear in
  students everywhere. It is a topic that makes
  them tremble in their seats. Teachers try to
  explain the material. Websites struggle to
  illustrate the concepts. Still, many kids
  scratch their heads in confusion and dismay.

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• Identify the type of each sentence.
• Indicate the place where the author should vary
  the sentence type by writing VAR.

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?
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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• Where can I
• Combine choppy sentences?
• Vary sentence openings?
• Vary sentence structures?
• Vary the order of sentence elements?

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Aim How can we apply sentence-level revision to
make our narratives more interesting?

• Homework Publish your narrative!
• Bring your final, typed version to class.
• Remember to format your work properly and attach
  a rubric Posted online!