Title: DESCRIPTION PATTERN OF EXPOSITION
1DESCRIPTION PATTERN OF EXPOSITION
2Describing places with tactile images
- with tactile imagery
- The steamy closeness of the Brazilian jungle
3Describe places with visual images
- The gray stone, narrow streets, tall houses and
church spires of n Eastern European city Warsaw
4Describe places with auditory images
- The one-lungers throbbed and fluttered, and the
twin-cylinder ones purred and purred, and that
was a quiet sound, too. (EB White remembering
outboard motors on his lake vacations)
5Describing places with gustatory images
- Theres a sunny corner in the kitchen where I
always ate my toastgrilled in the oven,
sometimes with cinnamon sugar and sometimes jam,
but always the way my mother made it, buttered on
both sides. (Joyce Maynards house)
6Describe places with olfactory images
- The acrid smell of a wood fire penetrated every
inch of our campsite.
7You can create portraits of
- People
- Qualities
- Emotions
- Moods
8Create portraits of people through Description
- The victim is in good shape. He shivers
slightly, although the trauma room is exceedingly
warm. His face is bloodied, but shows no major
lacerations. A third nurseasks the man a series
of questionshe answers abruptly. He is drunk.
(-George Simpson describing a patient at Bellevue
ER)
9Describe the qualities of freedom
- How does this cartoonist describe freedom?
- What qualities of freedom is he implying if any?
10Describe freedoms qualities as depicted in this
image
11What are the qualities of a ghost town you would
use in a description?
12Describe an emotion
- What effects does anger have on behavior? (red
face, clenched fists, teeth bared, eyebrows drawn
together, stiffened body, etc)
13Describe a mood
- Rejoicing arms up and out, hands open, legs
apart, head up, eyes on the sky, or maybe closed.
14Another mood to describe
15When you use Description
- Remember your purpose
- Remember your audience
- Is the picture you are painting the most
effective picture for your purpose and your
audience?
16Descriptive writing follows one of two strategies
- In objective description, you aim at conveying
detains of a subject thoroughly and accurately
without suggesting your feelings or biases and
without trying to evoke an emotional response
from your readers. - In subjective description, you make your values
and feelings clear and often encourage readers to
respond emotionally.
17DOMINANT IMPRESSION
- Successful subjective descriptions generally
focus on a single dominant impression, which can
act in place of a conclusions or thesis. - To create a Dominant Impression, you select those
details that will help create a mood or
atmosphere or emphasize a feature or quality.
18DEVELOPING YOUR DESCRIPTION
- For scenes or objects
- What does it look like (colors, shapes, height,
depth?) - What does it sound like? (loud, soft, rasping,
soothing, musical, like a lawn mower)? - What does it smell like? (smoky, acrid, like
gasoline, like soap, like a wood fire?) - What does it feel like? (smooth, sticky, like a
cats fur, like spiders web, like grease?) - What does it taste like? (bitter, salty, like
grass, like feathers?)
19DEVELOPING YOUR DESCRIPTION
- For emotions or ideas
- What effect does it have on behavior (anger red
face, abrupt gestures?) - What is it like (freedom like taking a deep
breath of air after leaving a smoky room?)
20DEVELOPING YOUR DESCRIPTION
- For people
- What does the person look like (hair neatly
combed, rumpled blouse, muddy boots?) - What are some characteristic behaviors (rubs
hands on skirt, picks ears?) - What has the person done or said (cheated on a
chem test, said cruel things to their teacher, ?
?) - How do others respond to the person (turn to her
for advice, call him a slob?)