building paragraphs

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building paragraphs
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A Life of Adventure

• mary seacole was born in 1805 in kingston
  jamaica her mother practised as a doctress
  using medical knowledge which women had brought
  from africa and developed in the tropics from her
  mother mary inherited her medical skills as well
  as her ability to run a boarding house from her
  father a scottish military man she inherited her
  fascination with army life marys own medical
  reputation was established during a series of
  cholera and yellow fever epidemics she made her
  own medicines and emphasised high standards of
  hygeine as well as enforcing strict quarantine on
  victims by these methods she saved many lives on
  the outbreak of the crimean war mary volunteered
  her services to the british army although she had
  worked for the army before at its own request
  this time she was turned down undaunted mary made
  her own way to the war zone once in the crimea
  she not only nursed the soldiers but also ran a
  hotel and sold food wine and medicines after the
  war mary was treated as a celebrity she was
  decorated by the governments of four countries in
  england a poem in her honour was published in
  punch and even the royal family requested her
  company and medical expertise

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A Life of Adventure

• mary seacole was born in 1805 in kingston
  jamaica her mother practised as a doctress
  using medical knowledge which women had brought
  from africa and developed in the tropics from her
  mother mary inherited her medical skills as well
  as her ability to run a boarding house from her
  father a scottish military man she inherited her
  fascination with army life marys own medical
  reputation was established during a series of
  cholera and yellow fever epidemics she made her
  own medicines and emphasised high standards of
  hygeine as well as enforcing strict quarantine on
  victims by these methods she saved many lives on
  the outbreak of the crimean war mary volunteered
  her services to the british army although she had
  worked for the army before at its own request
  this time she was turned down undaunted mary made
  her own way to the war zone once in the crimea
  she not only nursed the soldiers but also ran a
  hotel and sold food wine and medicines after the
  war mary was treated as a celebrity she was
  decorated by the governments of four countries in
  england a poem in her honour was published in
  punch and even the royal family requested her
  company and medical expertise

Separate into 1. sentences 2.
paragraphs.
Exercise 1 (5 mins)
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What is a paragraph?

• A group of sentences
• What groups them?
• One idea

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A Life of Adventure

• mary seacole was born in 1805 in kingston
  jamaica her mother practised as a doctress
  using medical knowledge which women had brought
  from africa and developed in the tropics from her
  mother mary inherited her medical skills as well
  as her ability to run a boarding house from her
  father a scottish military man she inherited her
  fascination with army life marys own medical
  reputation was established during a series of
  cholera and yellow fever epidemics she made her
  own medicines and emphasised high standards of
  hygeine as well as enforcing strict quarantine on
  victims by these methods she saved many lives on
  the outbreak of the crimean war mary volunteered
  her services to the british army although she had
  worked for the army before at its own request
  this time she was turned down undaunted mary made
  her own way to the war zone once in the crimea
  she not only nursed the soldiers but also ran a
  hotel and sold food wine and medicines after the
  war mary was treated as a celebrity she was
  decorated by the governments of four countries in
  england a poem in her honour was published in
  punch and even the royal family requested her
  company and medical expertise

Write down the main theme for each paragraph
Exercise 1 (5 mins)
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Outlines are your recipe
What do you want to say? Structure
planning
Communicating your ideas
writing
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Outlining Level 3

• Nursing and models
• 1.1 Brief history of Nursing practice
• Began formally 1790 (Nightingale)
• Largely disorganised
• Original mission to heal
• 1.2 The purpose of a model
• Because of disorganisation, model.
• Argument for a model.
• 2. History of models
• 2.1 The first model
• Johnson 1820
• 2.2 Development and timeline.
• Model A
• Model B
• 3. The Markov Model Strengths Weaknesses
• 3.1 What is the model
• Multi-team.
• 3.2 Strengths
• 3.3 Weaknesses

Level 3
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Structure

• Introduction
• outline of essay
• Main section
• Main point A
• details, evidence
• Main point B
• Conclusion
• summary of main points
• personal conclusions

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Structure

• Essay Paragraph

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paragraph structure

• Students require more recreational time in order
  to better
• focus on lessons in class. In fact, studies have
  shown that
• students who enjoy a recess of more than 45
  minutes
• consistently score better on tests immediately
  following the
• recess period. Clinical analysis further suggests
  that
• physical exercise greatly improves the ability to
  focus on
• academic materials. Longer periods of recess are
  clearly
• required to allow students the best possible
  chances of
• success in their studies. Clearly, physical
  exercise is just
• one of the necessary ingredients for improving
  student
• scores on standardized tests.

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topic sentence

• Students require more recreational time in order
  to better
• focus on lessons in class. In fact, studies have
  shown that
• students who enjoy a recess of more than 45
  minutes
• consistently score better on tests immediately
  following the
• recess period. Clinical analysis further suggests
  that
• physical exercise greatly improves the ability to
  focus on
• academic materials. Longer periods of recess are
  clearly
• required to allow students the best possible
  chances of
• success in their studies. Clearly, physical
  exercise is just
• one of the necessary ingredients for improving
  student
• scores on standardized tests.

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supporting sentences

• Students require more recreational time in order
  to better
• focus on lessons in class. In fact, studies have
  shown that
• students who enjoy a recess of more than 45
  minutes
• consistently score better on tests immediately
  following the
• recess period. Clinical analysis further suggests
  that
• physical exercise greatly improves the ability to
  focus on
• academic materials. Longer periods of recess are
  clearly
• required to allow students the best possible
  chances of
• success in their studies. Clearly, physical
  exercise is just
• one of the necessary ingredients for improving
  student
• scores on standardized tests.

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concluding sentence

• Students require more recreational time in order
  to better
• focus on lessons in class. In fact, studies have
  shown that
• students who enjoy a recess of more than 45
  minutes
• consistently score better on tests immediately
  following the
• recess period. Clinical analysis further suggests
  that
• physical exercise greatly improves the ability to
  focus on
• academic materials. Longer periods of recess are
  clearly
• required to allow students the best possible
  chances of
• success in their studies. Clearly, physical
  exercise is just
• one of the necessary ingredients for improving
  student
• scores on standardized tests.

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transitional sentence

• Students require more recreational time in order
  to better
• focus on lessons in class. In fact, studies have
  shown that
• students who enjoy a recess of more than 45
  minutes
• consistently score better on tests immediately
  following the
• recess period. Clinical analysis further suggests
  that
• physical exercise greatly improves the ability to
  focus on
• academic materials. Longer periods of recess are
  clearly
• required to allow students the best possible
  chances of
• success in their studies. Clearly, physical
  exercise is just
• one of the necessary ingredients for improving
  student
• scores on standardized tests.

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paragraph recipe

1. Introduce
2. Expand/justify
3. Conclude
4. Transition Sentences

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Paragraph Malfunction

• Too long (no structure)
• No clear idea or too many ideas
• Poor flow (linking words)
• Avoid these with outlines.

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Linking words

• First
• Furthermore
• Another
• In addition to
• However
• On the other hand
• Consequently

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Paragraph Building
1.

• On the blank piece of paper provided, write
• a topic sentence.
• Pick any idea or subject you like.
• If youre stuck try some of the following
• Cats are mans best friend
• Virtual friends but lonely
• Celebrity
• Youre such a tweet

5 mins
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Paragraph Building
2.

• Pass the sheet to the person beside you.
• Read the topic sentence youve just received.
• Now write a supporting sentence for it.

2 mins
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Paragraph Building
3.

• Pass the sheet to the person beside you.
• Read the topic sentence supporting sentence
  youve just received.
• Now write another supporting sentence
• for it.

2 mins
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Paragraph Building
4.

• Pass the sheet to the person beside you.
• Read the topic sentence 2 supporting sentences
  youve just received.
• Now write a concluding sentence
• for it.

3 mins
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A Life of Adventure

• mary seacole was born in 1805 in kingston
  jamaica her mother practised as a doctress
  using medical knowledge which women had brought
  from africa and developed in the tropics from her
  mother mary inherited her medical skills as well
  as her ability to run a boarding house from her
  father a scottish military man she inherited her
  fascination with army life marys own medical
  reputation was established during a series of
  cholera and yellow fever epidemics she made her
  own medicines and emphasised high standards of
  hygeine as well as enforcing strict quarantine on
  victims by these methods she saved many lives on
  the outbreak of the crimean war mary volunteered
  her services to the british army although she had
  worked for the army before at its own request
  this time she was turned down undaunted mary made
  her own way to the war zone once in the crimea
  she not only nursed the soldiers but also ran a
  hotel and sold food wine and medicines after the
  war mary was treated as a celebrity she was
  decorated by the governments of four countries in
  england a poem in her honour was published in
  punch and even the royal family requested her
  company and medical expertise

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Listen to your writing

• Flow
• Vary sentence and paragraph length
• Rhythm
• Read out loud

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Introduction Outline (5 mins)

• 1. Good health v. imp
• Welfare
• Economic development
• Social development
• 2. WHOs goal
• Healthcare for all
• Balanced with countries able to pay for this
• 3. This report
• What can be done to change health systems to
  achieve universal coverage
• Builds on new research and countries experience

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• The world health report - Health systems
  financing the path to
• universal coverage
• Good health is essential to human welfare and to
  sustained economic
• and social development.
• WHO's Member States have set themselves the
  target of developing their health
• financing systems to ensure that all people can
  use health services, while being
• protected against financial hardship associated
  with paying for them.
• In this report, the World Health Organization
  maps out what countries can do to
• modify their financing systems so they can move
  more quickly towards this goal
• it builds on new research and lessons learnt from
  country
• experience.
• Taken from Executive Summary to WHO report
  http//www.who.int/whr/2010/en/index.html

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paragraph recipe

1. Introduce
2. Expand/justify
3. Conclude
4. Transition Sentences

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Structure

• Essay Paragraph